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FYI- Hult and Forlo are the two humans, and eldako and Shedara are elves. Eldako, Shedara, and a small contingent of Silvanaes warriors made their way to Kristophan by ship, and while Hult and Forlo were fighting in the Imperial Arena, they attacked the assembled minotaurs. The elves managed to rescue the two humans and escape from the city, and afterward, Eldako journeyed with Shedara, Hult, and Forlo to the icy wastes of the Panak Desert in search of the Wyrm-Namer.