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Over the years since his House’s destruction, Alton had continually tried to discover the name of those whom he desired vengeance against, but he repeatedly failed. Eventually, Alton was revealed to SiNafay, the Matron Mother of House Hun'ett, but was accepted into her House and came under her protection. SiNafay also revealed to Alton that it was House Do'Urden that had massacred his family, and he immediately began to anticipate the moment when he would have his revenge.

Philip · Accepted Answer

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Shayan Shaikh · Answer

Over the years since his House’s destruction, Alton had continually tried to discover the name of those whom he desired vengeance against, but he repeatedly failed. Eventually, Alton was revealed to SiNafay, the Matron Mother of House Hun'ett, but was accepted into her House and came under her protection. SiNafay also revealed to Alton that it was House Do'Urden that had massacred his family, and he immediately began to anticipate the moment when he would have his revenge.

I don't see any mistakes except the "H" should be written in small letter. I don't think it is necessary to write it in caps there.

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