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FYI- Tammith is the vampire. While the Council and their subordinates were still discussing their new strategy, Tammith interrupted the meeting and told the assembled leaders that she wanted to join the southern forces and fight against Szass Tam in order to attain revenge for her magical enslavement. The vampire also induced the zulkirs and the others to assault Xingax’s undead manufactory, which was hidden in the desolate foothills of the Thaymount, in order to prevent Szass Tam’s legions from being reinforced with new undead troops.