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FYI- Bareris is the bard. After recovering from the virulent fever that his wound had induced, Bareris left Tyraturos and journeyed north in pursuit of Tammith and her captors. By bribing and questioning people as he tracked his beloved north, the bard discovered that over the course of the last few weeks, Red Wizards of Necromancy and their agents had marched a significant number of slaves into the sparsely populated northern region of Thay. When Bareris eventually caught up with the slave procession in the open country of the north, he tried to secure Tammith’s release by negotiating with the two necromancers in command of the caravan, Muthoth and So-Kehur, but his efforts failed and the mages and their guards attacked him.