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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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As the Council of Zulkirs’ legions prepared for the upcoming battle against Szass Tam, Aoth confided in Bareris his thoughts of abandoning the war and leaving Thay with any of the griffon riders who wanted to accompany him. However, Bareris, who was determined to gain vengeance on Szass Tam and his necromancers for Tammith’s transformation into a vampire, realized how important Aoth and his aerial company were to the Council’s cause and used his bardic magic to persuade his friend to stay in Thay and keep fighting.
  

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cboutin3 cause , and so he used his bardic magic to persuade his friend to stay in Thay and keep fighting. I think this reads more smoothly.

— Philip

  • cboutin3 cause , and so he used his bardic magic to persuade his friend to stay in Thay and keep fighting.
  • I think this reads more smoothly.
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cboutin3 cause, and so he used his bardic magic to persuade his friend to stay in Thay and keep fighting.
I think this reads more smoothly.
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