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Wang.cupid Posted 15 years ago
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Are these linking words correct in this paragraph?
Hi, the following sentences is part of my essay? Are these linking words all right?
I wish to pursue doctoral study at the University of S in Canada this fall. This is partly due to the fact that I am getting fascinated by Canada's research atmosphere after I once worked at Lakehead University as a visiting scholar for one year with Dr. X on his NSERC grant. Also, I have a strong belief that North American education system has the best to offer in the whole world. Another reason has to do with the state-of-the-art research facilities and the world renowned and productive faculty of the university.
By the way, are there any other errors? Thank you very much!
I wish to pursue doctoral study at the University of S in Canada this fall. This is partly due to the fact that I am getting fascinated by Canada's research atmosphere after I once worked at Lakehead University as a visiting scholar for one year with Dr. X on his NSERC grant. Also, I have a strong belief that North American education system has the best to offer in the whole world. Another reason has to do with the state-of-the-art research facilities and the world renowned and productive faculty of the university.
By the way, are there any other errors? Thank you very much!
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-- No; that wordiness is a mark of poor style. g. 2007)] with Dr.
- -- No; that wordiness is a mark of poor style.
- g.
- 2007)] with Dr.
- Alexander X under his NSERC grant.
- The North American educational system is one of the best in the world, and the University of S has state-of-the-art research facilities and a world-renowned faculty.
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Are these linking words all right?-- No; that wordiness is a mark of poor style.
I wish to pursue my PhD at the University of S this fall because I was impressed by Canada's research atmosphere when I worked at Lakehead University as a visiting scholar in [year (e.g. 2007)] with Dr. Alexander X under his NSERC grant. The
I wish to pursue my PhD at the University of S this fall because I was impressed by Canada's research atmosphere when I worked at Lakehead University as a visiting scholar in [year (e.g. 2007)] with Dr. Alexander X under his NSERC grant. The
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