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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Are there mistakes in here?

Hi!
Could you please take a look whether there are mistakes in this sentence? Any improvements necessary?

During weekends and holidays different activities are being organized for the development, recreation, and entertainment of the students, for example sports games, intellectual games, watching and discussing movies, tournaments, competitions etc.

Thank you!
  

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Too verbose. This is all that is necessary: Weekend and holidays activities are being organized for students—sports, intellectual games, movies, etc.

  • Too verbose.
  • This is all that is necessary: Weekend and holidays activities are being organized for students—sports, intellectual games, movies, etc.
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Too verbose. This is all that is necessary:

Weekend and holidays activities are being organized for students—sports, intellectual games, movies, etc.

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