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Do you think we rely too much on cars? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

I think we do, but it's because we're used to it. People usually use their cars to go to work and sometimes to travel longer distances. But nowadays people are using their cars to go to places they can go to by foot. So they contaminate the environment and become very sedentary. In our country fuel is very expensive and the short journeys can cost us a lot.
People in Italy, for example, cycle to work or other places improving their heath and saving a lot of money. It's comfortable because you don't have to worry where to park your car in the city.
By taking the metro, the bus or another public mean of transport you avoid traffic jams. Also a lot of people die every year because of car accidents.
I think we should try not to use that much the car and use more other mean of transport when it's possible.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Hello, Lavinia – and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some problem areas:

I think we do (Do what? You must include a statement of the topic of the essay within the introduction), but it's because we're used to it. People usually use their cars to go to work and sometimes to travel longer distances. But nowadays people are using their cars to go to places they can go to by foot. So they contaminate the environment and become very sedentary. In our country fuel is very expensive and the short journeys can cost us a lot.
People in Italy, for example, cycle to work or other places improving their heath and saving a lot of money. It's comfortable because you don't have to worry where to park your car in the city.
By taking the metro, the bus or another public mean of transport you avoid traffic jams. Also a lot of people die every year because of car accidents.
I think we should try not to use that much the car and use more other mean of transport when it's possible.

Lavinia94 · Answer

I think we rely on cars so much, but it is because we are used to it. People usually use their cars to go to work and sometimes to travel longer distances. But nowadays people are using their cars to go to places they can go to by foot. They contaminate the environment. They also become very sedentary. In our country, fuel is very expensive and short journeys can cost us a lot.
People in Italy, for example, cycle to work or other places, improving their health and saving a lot of money. It's comfortable because you don't have to worry where to park your car in the city.
By taking the metro, the bus or another public means of transport, you avoid traffic jams. Also a lot of people die every year because of car accidents.
I think we should try not to use so much the car and use more other mean of transport when it is possible.

Now? Could you tell me more about my mistakes? What can I replace them with?
Thank you.

Mister Micawber · Answer

I think we rely on cars too much, but it is because we are used to them. People usually use their cars to go to work and sometimes to travel longer distances. But nowadays people are using their cars to go to places they can go to by foot, so they contaminate the environment. They also become very sedentary. In our country, fuel is very expensive and short journeys can cost us a lot.

People in Italy, for example, cycle to work or other places, improving their health and saving a lot of money. It is convenient because they do not have to worry where to park their car in the city.
By taking the metro, the bus or another public means of transport, they avoid traffic jams. Also a lot of people die every year because of car accidents.

I think we should try not to use our cars so much and use other means of transport when it is possible.

Lavinia94 · Answer

Thank you very much for your patience.

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