Are the two sentences perfect as they are? In the first, would a "has" between "Mark" and "just" be preferred?
She follows him to the shed where he opens the door to reveal the bodies of the two creatures Mark just killed.
She follows him to the shed where he opens the door to reveal the bodies of the two creatures Mark killed before.
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