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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Are the parts of this sentence correctly structured and placed?

Once out of the arena, Forlo exacted revenge on Rekhaz by killing him and mutilating his body before escaping Kristophan by ship and traveling with Hult, Shedara, and Eldako to the icy wastes of the Panak Desert in search of the Wyrm-Namer.
  

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Don't run everything into one sentence. Separate events and actions. For example: Once out of the arena, Forlo took revenge on Rekhaz by killing him and mutilating his body.

  • Don't run everything into one sentence.
  • Separate events and actions.
  • For example: Once out of the arena, Forlo took revenge on Rekhaz by killing him and mutilating his body.
  • Forlo then escaped Kristophan by shop, traveling with Hult, Shedara, and Eldako to the icy wastes of the Panak Desert.
  • There they would search for the Wyrm-Namer.
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Don't run everything into one sentence. Separate events and actions. For example:

Once out of the arena, Forlo took revenge on Rekhaz by killing him and mutilating his body. Forlo then escaped Kristophan by shop, traveling with Hult, Shedara, and Eldako to the icy wastes of the Panak Desert. There they would search for the Wyrm-Namer.

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