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Leecarlton Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

Are my tenses and grammar correct here?

I don't love these sentences, and would definitely appreciate some help in making them better. Thanks in advance!

Paul brings over 30 years of experience in accounting and finance to his role as Controller. His journey began when he received his Bachelors of Science Degree in Accounting at Brooklyn College, and he recently received his Masters in International Finance from Fairleigh Dickson University.
  

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'Journey' is rather poetic for a biography. No need to write out the degrees; it just wastes readers' time. Paul brings over 30 years of experience in accounting and finance to his role as Controller.

  • 'Journey' is rather poetic for a biography.
  • No need to write out the degrees; it just wastes readers' time.
  • Paul brings over 30 years of experience in accounting and finance to his role as Controller.
  • His career began when he received his BS in Accounting from Brooklyn College, and he recently received his MA ( ?
  • ) in International Finance from Fairleigh Dickson University.
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'Journey' is rather poetic for a biography. No need to write out the degrees; it just wastes readers' time.

Paul brings over 30 years of experience in accounting and finance to his role as Controller. His career began when he received his BS in Accounting from Brooklyn College, and he recently received his MA (?) in International Finance from Fai

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