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"Life is about living in the moment", this was my first impression when I met Piyush. His triats are not just in giving the best results but in performing the best under stressful situations. Strong analytical skills, adorable personality, lucrative voice and great presentation skills are few of his qualities that make him a true asset for any company.
He is one of those rare people who can input at the micro-level whilst maintaining and promoting a consistent macro-level vision. It was always a pleasure for me to work with Piyush. He was open to suggestion and was very forward thinking in his approach to staffing. He was respectful and professional and always took a strategic approach to his team development. I wish you have a bright future ahead.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

I have underlined some problem areas:

"Life is about living in the moment", this was my first impression when I met Piyush. His triats are not just in giving the best results but in performing the best under stressful situations. Strong analytical skills, adorable personality, lucrative voice and great presentation skills are few of his qualities that make him a true asset for any company.

He is one of those rare people who can input at the micro-level whilst maintaining and promoting a consistent macro-level vision. It was always a pleasure for me to work with Piyush. He was open to suggestion and was very forward thinking in his approach to staffing. He was respectful and professional and always took a strategic approach to his team development. I wish you have a bright future ahead.

Pawan24 · Answer

Thank you for replying to my question.I have made amendments in the last draft. Below is the revised draft. Would appreciate your help, if you could answer the questions I have raised in this.

“Life is about living in the moment”, this was my first impression when I met Piyush. His traits, of unwillingness to settle for anything but the best, show his assiduous character. Strong analytical skills, adorable (personality can be attractive, why this is incorrect?) personality, lucrative voice (by using the word lucrative, I want to say that this person can earn revenue just by talking)and great presentation skills are some of his qualities that make him a true asset for any company.

He is one of those rare people who can input at the micro-level whilst maintaining and promoting a consistent macro-level vision. It was always a pleasure for me to work with Piyush. He was open to suggestion and was very forward thinking in his approach to staffing. He was respectful and professional and always took a strategic approach to his team development. Have a bright future ahead.

Mister Micawber · Answer

You have changed the text. I have underlined remaining problems:

"Life is about living in the moment": this was my first impression when I met Piyush. His traits, of unwillingness to settle for anything but the best, show his assiduous character. Strong analytical skills, adorable (personality can be attractive, why this is incorrect?-- It is appropriate for puppies, not people in a business reference. It sounds like you are sexually attracted to him. Does that sound incorrect enough?) personality, lucrative voice (by using the word lucrative, I want to say that this person can earn revenue just by talking-- It doesn't work. Change it. ) and great presentation skills are some of his qualities that make him a true asset for any company.

He is one of those rare people who can input at the micro-level whilst maintaining and promoting a consistent macro-level vision. It was always a pleasure for me to work with Piyush. He was open to suggestion and was very forward thinking in his approach to staffing. He was respectful and professional and always took a strategic approach to his team development. Have a bright future ahead (Do not address this last remark directly to Piyush, as you have been doing).

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