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MatiasC Posted 10 years ago
Letter Writing

Application to European University (Motivation)

Hello everyone!

I'm going to apply to a European University so I've been doing my Motivation Letter. I've found this website extremely useful and benefited with all the information available about How to write a Motivation Letter, so THANK YOU.

However, my case is especial since the university I want to apply put a limit of 400 WORDS in your Motivation Letter, so I've found it challenging. It took me a month to finish my letter but now I would really appreciate if you can revise, correct, or critic it! Every suggestion is welcome.

University of Blahblah
June 30, 2016

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply to your Master's degree program in "Biomedical Sciences" with specialization in "Infection and Immunity", starting in October 2017. My career ambition is to become a doctor in Life Sciences oriented to solve Public Health issues.

As I have always had an enquiring mind about nature, I chose a Natural Science orientation in high school and I assisted to "Science Expedition", a scientific camp in South Argentina, at my 16 years old. After school I continued my academic career at the National University of Quilmes and graduated with a Bachelor of Biotechnology degree, being part of the top 10% of students from my graduating class. Amazed by all I had learned about molecular biology, I decided to do my thesis in the field of health, performing research in the Laboratory of Immunology and Virology, where I genetically modified a probiotic bacterium to its study as a vaccine. During my thesis I sharpened my critical thinking and realised the potential of biotechnology to fight infectious diseases.

My passion for biomedicine and my enthusiasm for improving people's health led me to start working at the National Institute of Infectious Diseases, dependant on the Ministry of Health of my country, soon before my graduation. This work has been invigorating and challenging, since I took part in the development of a molecular diagnosis essay for Ebola virus during the emergency in 2014, and assisted in Dengue virus diagnosis during the 2016 outbreak in Argentina. Furthermore, this experience made me aware of the high number of people that die from preventable diseases and therefore strengthened my social commitment.

I want to express my wish to be nominated to the Amsterdam Merit Scholarship, since I cannot afford the costs of tuition and living. Besides, considering the full-time mode of the Master's programme I will not be able to work while studying and give all my best. I am tremendously determined to make the most out of the scholarship benefits.

Finally, I have chosen the UvA not only for its strong international reputation, but also because it reflects the multicultural character of The Netherlands. Moreover, with many distinguished scientists as professors and cooperation with top biomedical centres, I know the UvA provides exceptional education and research possibilities. This opportunity represents the next outstanding challenge in my life.

Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.

Sincerely yours,

ABCD
  

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply to for your m aster's degree program in "Biomedical Sciences" with specialization in "Infection and Immunity", starting in October 2017. My career ambition is to become a doctor in l ife s ciences oriented to solve and work on p ublic h ealth issues. As I have always had an enquiring mind about nature, I chose a n atura l-s cience orientation in high schoo l, and I assisted to with "Science Expedition" - a scientific camp in s outh Argentina, at my when was 16 years old.

  • Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply to for your m aster's degree program in "Biomedical Sciences" with specialization in "Infection and Immunity", starting in October 2017.
  • My career ambition is to become a doctor in l ife s ciences oriented to solve and work on p ublic h ealth issues.
  • As I have always had an enquiring mind about nature, I chose a n atura l-s cience orientation in high schoo l, and I assisted to with "Science Expedition" - a scientific camp in s outh Argentina, at my when was 16 years old.
  • After schoo l, I continued my academic career at the National University of Quilmes and graduated with a Bachelor of Biotechnology degree, being part of the top 10% of students from my graduating class.
  • Amazed Inspired by all I had learned about molecular biology, I decided to do my thesis in the field of health, performing research in the Laboratory of Immunology and Virology, where I genetically modified a probiotic bacterium to its study as a vaccine.
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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply to for your master's degree program in "Biomedical Sciences" with specialization in "Infection and Immunity", starting in October 2017. My career ambition is to become a doctor in life sciences oriented to solve and work on public health issues.

As I have always had an enquiri
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I am writing to apply to your Master's degree program in "Biomedical Sciences" (no quotation marks) with specialization specializing (saves one word!) in "Infection and Immunity", starting in October 2017. My career ambition is to become a doctor in Life Sciences oriented to solve Public Health issues. (after my graduation is to tackle difficult publi
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Thank you so much!

Taking into account your suggestions my letter has improved a lot, and you helped me to shorten the number of words too.

teechr: The part you highlitghted I wanted to say that I modified a bacterium to transform it into a vaccine.. just to tell what I did in simple words, they will have my CV and thesis abstract.
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Can any one help me in presenting my personal summary in best possible presentable manner for my cv please.

personal summary:
A hardworking, pro-active Mech Engineer, graduated from UNSW Australia. Work experience over ten years with a unique blend of skills i.e. process quality control, Materials characterization, strategic material sourcing and with a project management skills looki
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Please write a new post for your question.
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please correct this letter
REQUEST FOR PERMISSION TO STUDY MASTERS PROGRAMME AT NATIONAL OPEN UNIVERSITY
I wish to request for permission to study master programme at National Open University of Nigeria! During my study I will be pursuing masters of information technology. The programme commences on September, 2016 and this program will not disturb me from performing my official duties.
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Sorry, I don't understand.
If this program will not disturb me from performing my official duties, why do you need permission?.

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