Application letter

Hello. I have written an application letter which might be very important for my future and would like you, if possible, to correct it. I know it's a bit long, so if you could please just point out my major mistakes and what you think is not clear, I would appreciate it very much.

Thanks in advance!

"I am a student of Mechanical Engineering at X, which is located in Curitiba, a city in the south of Brazil, and I am very interested in becoming a master degree student at X in France. I would appreciate very much to be considered for this position, as I think that the master degree courses on Petroleum Engineering that are held at X are the ones that are most related to my future prospectives.

As a person who is mostly motivated by challenge, I always wanted to take part into something that could make the difference in our own future. Therefore, during my undergraduation course I tried to find the best possibilities to learn, both academically, taking specific subjects about the areas in which I had interest, like Petroleum Chemics, and professionally, looking for interships that could help me to have more experience as a future engineer. Because of that, I started working in a company called X, in the Project Engineering Department, in which I realized that I could not only have the opportunity to learn more about how to develop new projects, but also to know how is the daily life of the workers of a factory.

After a whole year of work there, I was given the possibility of working at my university, in the X Laboratory. I decided to take this opportunity because I didn’t have, until then, the chance of doing research and also because there I could work with energy-related subjects, like petroleum production and drilling. In my opinion, energy is one of the most important themes to be discussed and studied worldwide, as its employment needs to bring profit for the company but also to respect the environment.

With that in mind, I started working at X in 2007 and am still there. Currently I work with Petroleum, studying the oil well drilling process, modeling the problem mathematically and also solving it numerically, in a project co-sponsored by Petrobras, the biggest Brazilian petroleum company. By working at X I also had the opportunity of going to X Conferece in 2008 to present an article about the drilling process. The conference was very interesting, as I could know the industry and other companies better.

Considering all of that, I would like to study more and to work in the Petroleum-related area. I think this would be the best opportunity for me to employ what I have learnt and also to learn much more.

Besides that, I am also very interested in learning about new cultures. I could cit, among my hobbies, along with reading and practicing sports, that I really enjoy learning new languages, as I think that the language represents much about a nation and its culture. It would be great to have the chance to learn more about this whole new world for me, which is France.

I appreciate your attention and ask you to let me know if you have any further questions."