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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Letter Writing
Application
Hello to everyone,
unfortunately, I cannot log-in to my account anymore..
Could someone please check the following two parts of my application?
Thank you a lot in advance!
"Shaping the future of your internationally operating group and gaining an overview of your different business divisions while working on project assignments caught my interest for your XXX program. My special interest applies to financial issues and I consider the overall insight into XXX as cornerstone for a future career. "
"The focus on XXX would allow me to work at the interface between business and financial management and interests me because of its scope of analytical and strategic tasks. Moreover, the international orientation and cross-boarder business operations make XXX an attractive employer to me. Especially the possibility to work on a foreign assignment and the professional and personal development opportunities, are very appealing."
unfortunately, I cannot log-in to my account anymore..
Could someone please check the following two parts of my application?
Thank you a lot in advance!
"Shaping the future of your internationally operating group and gaining an overview of your different business divisions while working on project assignments caught my interest for your XXX program. My special interest applies to financial issues and I consider the overall insight into XXX as cornerstone for a future career. "
"The focus on XXX would allow me to work at the interface between business and financial management and interests me because of its scope of analytical and strategic tasks. Moreover, the international orientation and cross-boarder business operations make XXX an attractive employer to me. Especially the possibility to work on a foreign assignment and the professional and personal development opportunities, are very appealing."
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Forgive me for saying so, but this text seems to me to be a bunch of high-level phrases pasted together and lacking in real substance. Here are a few comments on the first section. "Shaping the future of your internationally operating group This sounds like what a very senior person would do, eg a VP of International Operations.
- Forgive me for saying so, but this text seems to me to be a bunch of high-level phrases pasted together and lacking in real substance.
- Here are a few comments on the first section.
- "Shaping the future of your internationally operating group This sounds like what a very senior person would do, eg a VP of International Operations.
- Are you applying for a senior position?
- It would add substance if you said briefly in what way you would do this shaping of the future.
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Forgive me for saying so, but this text seems to me to be a bunch of high-level phrases pasted together and lacking in real substance.
Here are a few comments on the first section.
"Shaping the future of your internationally operating group T
Here are a few comments on the first section.
"Shaping the future of your internationally operating group T
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What sort of problem are you having with logging into your account? We may be able to help.
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Thank you for your honest feedback, Clive. It is a graduate position - so indeed 'shaping' might be the wrong wording.
Would you be so kind and have another look at it?
"Gaining an overview of your different business divisions while working on project assignments and thus establishing a group-wide network within *** caught my interest for your trainee program. My special interest a
Would you be so kind and have another look at it?
"Gaining an overview of your different business divisions while working on project assignments and thus establishing a group-wide network within *** caught my interest for your trainee program. My special interest a
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I was trying to use the "I forgot my password" function - but the system is telling me that my email is not verified and I should contact support. Who should I exactly contact in this case Blue Jay? Thank you for your help.
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"Gaining an overview of your different business divisions while working on project assignments and thus establishing a group-wide network within *** caught my interest for your trainee program.Can you say briefly how this will benefit the company?
My special interest applies to financial issues and I am highly motivated to learn how to efficie
My special interest applies to financial issues and I am highly motivated to learn how to efficie
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Clive"Gaining an overview of your different business divisions while working on project assignments and thus establishing a group-wide network within *** caught my interest for your trainee program.Can you say briefly how this will benefit the company?Thank you for your suggestion, Clive.
The quoted part should demonstrate why I am applying for this train
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AnonymousMy username is "Alemana"OK, I've found your account. You don't have an email address on record. Let me check with the Administrator who is in charge of this sort of thing, and either she or I will post back to this thread.
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