apathetic

Is the following sentence acceptable?

Huang Chun-ming and Lee Chia-tung's mood was the common concern of many people:Living a privileged and pampered life, in a competitive environment governed by exams, isn't the next generation likely to be apathetic?

I suggest this.
Huang Chun-ming and Lee Chia-tung's apathy

I am confused by the word ‘apathy’ in your first sentence, “Huang Chun-ming and Lee Chia-tung's apathy is typical of many people.” Actually, there were two events happening to each of them which raised their alarm prior to the sentence. Both Huang and Lee are prominent persons who have positive influences on the society. They are the symbolism of social conscience and worry about

You are now providing context that was not available in your original post.

'Mood' is not an appropriate word here. Try to say what you mean in another way. Do you, for example, mean their 'concern'?

My comment about the second sentence still stands. ie

How about phrasing as written:

Huang Chun-ming and Lee Chia-tung's concern is typical of many people. Living a privileged and pampered life, in a competitive environment governed by exams, isn't the next generation likely to be apathetic?

If the next generation lives in a competitive environment governed by exams, it will become a bookworm who is selfish and don’t know how to get along with people. We worry that the next generation who is cultivated by the society doesn’t care about his society when he grows up. As a result, he will become apathetic toward the people around him. Therefore, we should not only emphasize his