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Oprah Posted 20 years ago
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The maturity of computer technology in recent years has enabled the market position of Digital Image Surveillance Systems to expand from what used to be common only for building surveillance and security surveillance to now even the average household. This project uses a DSP with integrated video processing in combination with network transmission to detect objects instantaneously.
  

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Oprah The maturity of computer technology in recent years has enabled the market position of Digital Image Surveillance Systems to expand from what used to be common only for building surveillance and security surveillance to now even the average household. This project uses a DSP with integrated video processing in combination with network transmission to detect objects instantaneously. Overall, I think it's fine.

— Goodman

  • Oprah The maturity of computer technology in recent years has enabled the market position of Digital Image Surveillance Systems to expand from what used to be common only for building surveillance and security surveillance to now even the average household.
  • This project uses a DSP with integrated video processing in combination with network transmission to detect objects instantaneously.
  • Overall, I think it's fine.
  • I did a little editing, hope you don't mind.
  • The maturity of computer technology in recent years has enabled the market position of Digital Image Surveillance Systems to expand from what used to be exclusively used for building and security surveillance to now even the average household( s).
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OprahThe maturity of computer technology in recent years has enabled the market position of Digital Image Surveillance Systems to expand from what used to be common only for building surveillance and security surveillance to now even the average household. This project uses a DSP with integrated video processing in combination with network transmission to detect objects i
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Goodman,

Not only do I not mind your little editing, I greatly appreciate it!

Thank you for your help!
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