Anyone interested in English poems?

[nq:1]Hi, I write English poems and I'm Italian. Anyone interested in reading them and judge them?[/nq]
Would you mind sending one to this ng *. I'm just curious, and... Italian.
* Would "on to this ng" acceptable?
Bye, FB

[nq:1]* Would "on to this ng" be acceptable?[/nq]
Bye, FB

Mrs. Palmer, in her way, was equally angry. 'She was determined to drop his acquaintance immediately, and she was very thankful that she had never been acquainted with him at all'.

Hi,
thanks for replying. "On to this" I think it's redundant and bad-sounding. I'd rather say "to this ng", it's more direct...imho...well...I understood all the same.
Well, folks, the first poem is part of a trilogy of (obviously) three poems. They analize three aspects of the loneliness, how this mood starts, it develops, it grows inside me. Through my poems, the loneliness is associated

[nq:1]Hi, thanks for replying. "On to this" I think it's redundant and bad-sounding. I'd rather say "to this ng", it's ... is associated with a girl of admirable beauty, because I have never been with a girl, hence I'm feeling alone.[/nq]
I thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was really particularly effective.

John Briggs

* John Briggs (Email Removed) (240404 15:49):
[nq:1]I thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was really particularly effective. John Briggs[/nq]
Thanks for your replying, I must know if I write well and without errors. Thanks for your opinion, a lot! At last I know that I can transmit passions and strong feelings to the people, with my writing.

I don't know if metaphysical

[nq:2]I thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was really particularly effective. John Briggs[/nq]
[nq:1]Thanks for your replying, I must know if I write well and without errors. Thanks for your opinion, a lot! ... I feel, no fantasy, reality is the secret for a successful writing. However I appreciate the "particularly effective". Thanks again.[/nq]
(PSST! I think Mr Briggs might h

Hi everybody,
here's the second and last (for the time being) poem. The loneliness generate illusions, and make me imagine love stories with unreal girls. This is the meaning of the poem. I hope you would appreciate that as you all did with the first.

I haven't decided yet about the third: I have to make up my mind between suicide or keep on going living this life in the eagerly hope

[nq:1]I haven't decided yet about the third: I have to make up my mind between suicide or keep on going living this life in the eagerly hope of an encounter...[/nq]
The latter, if I may venture an opinion, Wart... (witty face)
Bye, FB

[nq:2]Hi, thanks for replying. "On to this" I think it's ... have never been with a girl, hence I'm feeling alone.[/nq]
[nq:1]I thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was really particularly effective. But we'll still throw him off the ship anyway..[/nq]
ally (lurker... couldn't resist)

Thanks for all your answers,
but it seems that there's no one so clever to judge the grammar and the structure of a poem written by a normal guy who is anything but a poet.

Being so, I have to turn to another newsgroup, hoping to find really competent people and maybe some real poet.
Thanks anyway for your opinion (even if it was metaphisical), and goodbye, my friends, goodbye.