Anyone free to edit?

Dear All,

Anyone free to help out and edit my motivation letter? Feel free to criticize and suggest. Thank you in advance for your time. I'm sorry if I XXX'd out a lot of words.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I wish to express my interest in pursuing a Masters in XXXX offered by a consortium of XXX University, XXX School of Management and XXX School of Business as part of the XXXXX Programme for 2010-2012. I graduated from XXX in 200X with a Bachelor of Science in Commerce, Major in XXX Management.

I started my career as a media executive at an online advertising agency in XXX with the primary responsibility of drafting and strategizing the costs of the digital media space according to client requests.

However, I shifted my focus when I joined my parents in XXX and was accepted at a middle-east based logistic and shipping company as a customer service representative. My role entails interacting with customers to provide them with information in response to products or services inquiries and to handle and resolve complaints. I'm consistently challenged and motivated to maintain the best personality at the workplace by being calm in every situation and that in itself is fulfilling.

The shipping industry has always attracted me ever since and my present job just confirmed my interest to pursue a career in this field. When I came across the programme online, I saw it as a golden opportunity to finally advance in my career. Determined to be better skilled at dealing with customers, I hope to use this degree to prepare me for my professional goal of holding a management position in customer service.



I do believe pursuing a Masters in XXXXX Management is a perfect choice for my career goal. Primarily, it specializes in management offering the right combination of corporate expertise, and leadership and research skills necessary to hold a managerial position. Secondly, it turns my life-long dream of studying abroad into a reality as the programme allows me to learn from three established universities in Europe. I can finally get to experience a global learning experience and interact with people of different backgrounds and varying perspectives. Lastly, I hope to return to my home country and work thereafter after completing the programme. I deem it as a accomplishment when at the end of all this, I get to serve my country, apply the skills and knowledge that I will be acquiring and somehow contribute to alleviate its current hapless state.

I am humbly asking for your assistance in granting me the XXXX scholarship as it is the only way I can work towards the fulfillment of my educational goal. Rest assured that I am hardworking and willing to commit myself to my fullest potential on every task at hand. Thank you for taking your time to consider my application and I look forward to your favorable reply.



Respectfully yours,