Anyone check to grammar this sentences

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This sentences are from my FaceBook page.
First of all , i didn't study english grammar just learn from english animation or firms . and i want to make english sentence with good grammar. wanna to realize What is my english grammar level?
plz check and fix it. help me...

sentences here.

Really wish to Apple going to announce iPhone5 at June 11 in WWDC 2012
well,,, my old phone have been wanting some rest .
Sometimes, it have to reboot itself or didn't send a message or didn't accept from other phone call lolololol ...

JohnParis · Accepted Answer

Hello Seong Cheol Kang and welcome to English Forums.

Here are my suggestions for your Facebook page:
1. I really hope Apple announces that they are going to bring out the iPhone 5 on June 11 at the WWDC 2012.
2. My old phone is a bit tired.
3. Sometimes, it reboots on its own, or it doesn't send a message, or even accept calls from other phones.

Anonymous · Answer

I really wish that Apple will going to launch iPhone5 on June 11 in WWDC 2012. My old phone is not working properly anymore and it needs rest. Sometimes, it reboots on its own. It also doesn't send a message and even accepts incoming calls.

JohnParis · Answer

Hi Jaysonmura,
There are several errors in your post.
We are happy to have you answer questions posted in our forums if you try to be accurate. If you are not sure about any point, please check your grammar book or dictionary before posting– and don't forget to proofread your writing before you post it! Posts are moderated. If your posts are not helpful, the moderators may edit or delete them. If your posts are often are often incorrect, a moderator may contact you directly.

Anonymous · Answer

I'm willing to accept constructive criticisms. Tell me the errors. I will humbly accept it..^^

JohnParis · Answer

I really wish that Apple would launch (the) iPhone5 on June 11 at WWDC 2012.

My old phone is not working properly anymore and it needs rest. (While grammatically acceptable, the sentence is very awkward. Telephones don't need rest, they either work or they don't work. "Rest" will not fix the problem.)

Sometimes, it reboots on its own. Good

Also, it doesn't send messages and even accepts incoming calls. (Again, very awkward. Aren't telephones supposed to accept incoming calls? Wouldn't this indicate that the old phone is working properly?)

If you need other questions answered, please start a new thread.

John

Anonymous · Answer

Thank you.
"Simplicity is beauty."
Honestly, I'm not convinced on your explanation. I'm sorry for that. hahaha
What I want to say is "I don't think so."
I don't like arguments. I still believe that my answer is correct.
Thank you for the explanation you made.

Seong Cheol Kang · Answer

Thank you for good answers!

Dimsumexpress · Answer

nosyajarumThank you."Simplicity is beauty."Honestly, I'm not convinced on your explanation. I'm sorry for that. hahahaWhat I want to say is "I don't think so."I don't like arguments. I still believe that my answer is correct.Thank you for the explanation you made.

nosyajarumI don't like arguments. I still believe that my answer is correct.

nosyajarum,

I hope you are intelligent enough to realize arrogance is a man's worse attribute. In your case, it is compounded with ignorance.
After reading your post, I don't blame your teacher for your lack of social respect and proper grammar. I think no one can teach you anything. Do you know after an "auxiliary word", only bare infinitive is allowed. ".....will going to ..." is purely bad English. John Paris spent the time to help you with your mistakes. Instead of being humble and showing your appreciation, you repaid him with sarcasm. This is not a chatroom where one can be as rude and cute as he wishes, So if you wish to participate in the forum discussions, please act respectably. /user/bxprk/profile.htm:
I really wish that Apple will going to launch iPhone5 on June 11 in WWDC 2012. My old phone is not working properly anymore and it needs rest. Sometimes, it reboots on its own. It also doesn't send a message and even accepts incoming calls.

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