Could you check my grammar in this short paragraph, please?
Volunteerism is very important to teach children about how to work with older volunteers and to behave well as a volunteer. This project aims to refresh the value of volunteerism among students from tenth to twelve grades. Many ways to instill the value of volunteerism to students by participating with organization that aims to help people and the community such as Red Crescent Group, Library Assistant and Friends of the Environment Group. While students are participating in these groups, they have lifelong learning. “Students are learning to appreciate the value of volunteerism as a way of providing essential social and human services of fulfilling personal needs, and of continuing to grow and learn” (Bard, 1999, p.13). Volunteerism teaches student or volunteer experience, skill, patience and knowledge. These aspects are enough to characterize by young students to build strong and conscious generation. Volunteerism is a part of education, which teaches students many things about life. Considering the theme of volunteerism as essential of the nation for next generation is to take the initiative in leading this nation and to instill positive voluntary behaviors. It is important to increases the effectiveness of the countries, and push this value to think carefully about how I can motivate student to be initiatives, useful member and active in the community. Skills that children acquire from voluntary work benefit and affect them psychological and educational. Especially, volunteering is a wealth of social and humanitarian value that contributes to the implantation many human values. They encourage all members of the community towards him, and children are targeted in this project.
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This is a terribly confusing paragraph. Your ideas are not well thought out or organized. Some of your sentences simply do not make sense.
— Doctor D
This is a terribly confusing paragraph.
Your ideas are not well thought out or organized.
Some of your sentences simply do not make sense.
I would start by breaking this up.
Use short paragraphs focusing on one main idea.
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This is a terribly confusing paragraph. Your ideas are not well thought out or organized. Some of your sentences simply do not make sense. I would start by breaking this up. Use short paragraphs focusing on one main idea. Use briefer sentences. I have tried to make grammatical sense of your words, but this needs more work. Even when the sentences are clear, the logic of the order of your