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Dogs walked early in the morning run less risk of getting bitten by insects carrying dangerous diseases.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Masanori TakaokaAny mistakes?

No, but it could benefit by being tightened.

Dogs walked early in the morning run less risk of bites from disease-carrying insects.

Englishmaven · Answer

I did have to read it twice. At first I read the subject as "Dogs" and the past tense verb "walked." I soon realized that that was not the way to read it. I reread it.

It is a good sentence that makes good sense. Well done.

SoSaysSunny · Answer

EnglishmavenI did have to read it twice. At first I read the subject as "Dogs" and the past tense verb "walked." I soon realized that that was not the way to read it. I reread it.It is a good sentence that makes good sense. Well done.

I agree.

Although not strictly necessary, consider adding back some helper words to clarify the verb tense:

Dogs that are walked ...

SoSaysSunny · Answer

Dogs walked early in the morning run less risk of bites from disease-carrying insects.

Some Style Considerations

Following the image of dogs walking early in the morning, the phrase run less risk seems jarring.

Consider alternatives that couldn't describe dog movement:

Dogs that are walked in the early morning ...
... have a reduced risk
... are at reduced risk
... are at less risk
... have a lower risk
... benefit from a reduced risk
... are less vulnerable to

Is the risk being bitten or actually contracting a disease?

You may want to recast the risk wording:

Dogs that are walked in the early morning ...
... benefit from a reduced risk of contracting disease from insect bites.
... have a lower risk of contracting disease due to insect bites.
... are less vulnerable to insect-borne diseases.

Be sure the final wording is still a true statement in context.

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