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Wang.cupid Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
Any ideas about a part of my cover letter
This is my cover letter used to apply to a PhD degree. Could you please check it out and find out possible errors? Thanks in advance!
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I have strong combination of academic and industrial experience through my work in Universities and Industry. I have over 4 years' working and teaching experience in such areas as embedded systems, network technologies and robotics and have already accumulated extensive and excellent skills in programming in C/C++ and in designing filters, controllers and network protocols. Specifically, I joined the ECE Department of Hohai Universityin in 2006 where my primary appointment is with the Communications Group, but I am also cross listed with the Embedded Systems Group. ............................
If you need more information, please check the attached CV and let me know if the information is not presented in the CV.
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I have strong combination of academic and industrial experience through my work in Universities and Industry. I have over 4 years' working and teaching experience in such areas as embedded systems, network technologies and robotics and have already accumulated extensive and excellent skills in programming in C/C++ and in designing filters, controllers and network protocols. Specifically, I joined the ECE Department of Hohai Universityin in 2006 where my primary appointment is with the Communications Group, but I am also cross listed with the Embedded Systems Group. ............................
If you need more information, please check the attached CV and let me know if the information is not presented in the CV.
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corrections.... " after CV then delete the rest. It is too wordy...
- corrections....
- " after CV then delete the rest.
- It is too wordy...
- meaning you are taking up the readers time saying nothing much at all.
- Rob Hewson
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corrections....
"I have a strong......"
"4 years" -- no "' ' " needed
I would stop your sentence at the word "robotics" and then begin a new sentence starting with "I have also accumulated...."
"C/C++, designing filters, controllers, and network protocols."
"where my primary appintment WAS"
put a "." after "Group"
Take out the word "but" and s
"I have a strong......"
"4 years" -- no "' ' " needed
I would stop your sentence at the word "robotics" and then begin a new sentence starting with "I have also accumulated...."
"C/C++, designing filters, controllers, and network protocols."
"where my primary appintment WAS"
put a "." after "Group"
Take out the word "but" and s
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