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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

any grammatical error?

Hello everybody,
could you tell me if there is any grammatical error in my text ?:

"Created and developed by 3 young independant developers, "Hover : Revolt of Gamers" is a 3D free runner in a futuristic open world.
Inspired by the crazy Jet Set Radio, the interactivity of Mirror's Edge or the breathtakingly sensations of Spiderman, Hover let you play as a Gamer Team from another world, in opposition to the dictatorship in their city.
Outfitted in a special upgradeable high-tech suit with amazing features, the Gamers you play must unify themselves to fight the oppression. By jumping, sliding at high speed on the ground or on the air you have to put off the propaganda against the videogames.
A revolution can't be done alone ! Whether it's secondary characters in the solo mode or real players in multiplayer, you have to recruit the most motivated Gamers to put together an unstoppable squad !
Particulary suitable for the Oculus Rift, gear up for out of the world sensations!"

Thanks in advance Emotion: smile
  

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I have marked some of the problems. There are probably others, but I was unsure of them because I don't know this jargon very well. "Created and developed by 3 young independant developers, "Hover : Revolt of Gamers" is a 3D free runner in a futuristic open world.

  • I have marked some of the problems.
  • There are probably others, but I was unsure of them because I don't know this jargon very well.
  • "Created and developed by 3 young independant developers, "Hover : Revolt of Gamers" is a 3D free runner in a futuristic open world.
  • Inspired by the crazy Jet Set Radio, the interactivity of Mirror's Edge or the breathtakingly sensations of Spiderman, Hover let you play as a Gamer Team from another world, in opposition to the dictatorship in their city.
  • Outfitted in a special upgradeable high-tech suit with amazing features, the Gamers you play must unify themselves to fight the oppression.
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I have marked some of the problems. There are probably others, but I was unsure of them because I don't know this jargon very well.

"Created and developed by 3 young independant developers, "Hover : Revolt of Gamers" is a 3D free runner in a futuristic open wor
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thank you AlpheccaStars Emotion: smile
it is very helpful. I will look at yourmarked words and try something different.

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