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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing

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First time posting here, I'm writing a "poetry" for my girlfriend. I'll use it in a "kinetic typography", a beautiful way to say "I love you", I hope. Is there any error? Help me, please!

"Everytime I watch into your eyes... I see a Dream begun a month ago. I hope this Dream will never end because you are so f*cking special, I don't want to leave this fable cause you are a fallen star. I will help you, I won't hurt you, I will try to be like you. I can't handle when you're distant, I can cry for a goodbye, but I'll never leave you alone, it's a promise from my heart. When we are togheter I can see a piece of Heaven, and the only way I can feel that is by keeping your small hands. I wish I could stay with you, my honey, everytime I need to cry, but the time we pass togheter is the best I'll ever find. Thanks for all the things you've done and for all you're going to do, I don't think I'd breath alone, but I'm safe because of you!"

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First time posting here, I'm writing a "poetry" for my girlfriend. I'll use it in a "kinetic typography", a beautiful way to say "I love you", I hope. Is there any error?

  • First time posting here, I'm writing a "poetry" for my girlfriend.
  • I'll use it in a "kinetic typography", a beautiful way to say "I love you", I hope.
  • Is there any error?
  • Help me, please!
  • "Everytime I watch into your eyes...
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First time posting here, I'm writing a "poetry" for my girlfriend. I'll use it in a "kinetic typography", a beautiful way to say "I love you", I hope. Is there any error? Help me, please!

"Everytime I watch into your eyes... I see a Dream begun a month ago. I hope this Dream will never end because you are so f*cking special, I don't want to leave this fable 'cause you are a fallen star.
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I suggest that you lose this word at least: f*cking. There's nothing romantic about that. And keeping her hands?! What's your plan – dismemberment?

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