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Subject: english proficiency

Dear Admissions Committee of xxx,

With reference to the above subject, I would like to enclose a copy of my grades in Business English:

Third year of master’s degree in financial engineering	Business English 1	17,6
Business English 2	17,6
Fourth year of master’s degree in financial engineering	Business English 3	12,8
Business English 4	16,2

the entire transcript is uploaded

I have also enclosed a letter of recommendation written by the English teacher which has been signed and approved by the school administration.

I would like to ask your kindness to look with a positive eye to my request and grant me the chance to join your organization that is part of my professional dream.

Faithfully yours,