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Anonymous Posted 20 years ago
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Antonia: squeal

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01i00Would not the marriage without a mistress 01font00squeal, tilt and sink02font01font00?02font00 Is not the mistress the 00hidden dynamo00 of adultery as well as marriage, virus and vaccine? 02i02br
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00It is a metaphore: marriage: ship. Is squeal OK? or should it be creak or crack?02br
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00Is dynamo OK?02br
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00This is also a translation. I'm practicing it. Please, chek my grammar too.0-
  

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02font 00 Is not the mistress the hidden dynamo of adultery as well as marriage, virus and vaccine? 02i 02br 02br 00It is a metaphor01font 00e02font 00: marriage: ship. Is squeal OK?

— Clive

  • 02font 00 Is not the mistress the hidden dynamo of adultery as well as marriage, virus and vaccine?
  • 02i 02br 02br 00It is a metaphor01font 00e02font 00: marriage: ship.
  • Is squeal OK?
  • 01font 00 I suggest 'heel' instead of 'squeal'.
  • It continues the 'ship' metaphor (a ship heels or leans over in the wind), and by luck it also rhymnes with 'squeal'!
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0Hi Antonia,02br
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00I'm looking for an adequate metaphor01font00e02font00 here:01font00 The real problem is that you have two different metaphors here.02font02br
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01i00Would not the marriage without a mistress 01font00squeal, t
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0 Thank you Clive, actually in the original text there is no dynamo, but 01i00engine02i00. What do you think about 01i00engine02i00 in this context? 0-
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0Hi Antonia,02br
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00'Engine' doesn't fit with the image of 'virus . . .vaccine'. You need something related to infection, to the body.02br
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00Clive0-
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0Than inflamation is fine, isn't it? How does it sound to a native ear?0-
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0 But what can be done with 01i00hidden inflamation02i00. Can disease be hidden? 0-
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Hello everybody especially Clive,

I am going back to this thread because I again need your help. If I incorporate inflamation in the sentence, which preposition should I use?

Would not the marriage without a mistress heel, tilt and drown? Is not the mistress the hidden inflamation of adultery as well as of marriage, virus and vaccine?

Thank you
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Would not the marriage without a mistress squeal, tilt and sink? Is not the mistress the hidden engine of adultery as well as marriage, virus and vaccine?

Hi Antonija,
honestly, I do neither like nor understand the metaphor and comparison. As far as I comprehend it:

1 - marriage, virus, vaccine
marriage: wh
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Thank you Kajjo,

Your suggestion seems fine and it sounds much better than the previous version.
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As Kajjo says you have to decide whether you should be true to the author's words or not. The mixed metaphors are his and it's not the translator's job to enhance the text... but?

Anyway three versions from me :

Would not the marriage without a mistress become unhealthy? Is not the mistress the hidden stimulant to adultery but also to marriage, both a virus and a vaccine?
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Hello Alan.es,

Thank you so very much for your help and effort.

You might be surprised but the author is a woman.
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