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Nanuka Posted 13 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Another informal letter
I would really appreciate if someone could give me some feedback on this informal letter I have written.
I'm well aware that it must contain a lot of mistakes based on my english skills that are more than just out of practice.
Thanks for any kind of help!
Dear Luca,
How are you? I hope everything has been working out fine since you arrived home and that your concerns were totally unfounded.
Your mobile phone somehow managed to get into my baggage! Surely you've already missed it!
I' ve just found it in my bag yesterday when I was finally able to encourage myself to overcome my laziness and unpack my suitcase wholely.
Now I'm feeling even more ashamed of myself as my neglect concern you as well.
I could send your mobile phone to your country by express post.
If you are in favour with my suggestion send me your home's postal adress to my e-mail adress.
Please tell me whether you prefer another solution.
It was really sad that you had to leave the camping ground earlier than planned.
I hope at least your return trip was comfortable.
For sure your grandmother feels already better now that she got all her loved ones around her.
She is in our thoughts and we all hope that she will be enjoying better health soon.
After your departure we all really missed our camping neighbours.
We spend the rest of the time mainly staying inside due to the fact it was raining all day long for about three days.
We sat in our caravan playing cards and talking about the good old times.
Fortunately the weather lit up during the last two days of our stay so we were able to go on a trip to the seaside, I collected loads of seashells.
I enclosed the most beautiful one of them to my letter. I remember you having mentioned that your grandmother loves the seaside. Would you give the seashell to her in hope it may cheers her up.
I attached the photos we have taken as well and additionally some pictures of my plain everyday life.
If you feel like it it, I would also love to get some pictures of you.
Please write back soon so I'm imformed how to handle the mobile phone issue.
Give my love to your family.
Best wishes.
Anna
I'm well aware that it must contain a lot of mistakes based on my english skills that are more than just out of practice.
Thanks for any kind of help!
Dear Luca,
How are you? I hope everything has been working out fine since you arrived home and that your concerns were totally unfounded.
Your mobile phone somehow managed to get into my baggage! Surely you've already missed it!
I' ve just found it in my bag yesterday when I was finally able to encourage myself to overcome my laziness and unpack my suitcase wholely.
Now I'm feeling even more ashamed of myself as my neglect concern you as well.
I could send your mobile phone to your country by express post.
If you are in favour with my suggestion send me your home's postal adress to my e-mail adress.
Please tell me whether you prefer another solution.
It was really sad that you had to leave the camping ground earlier than planned.
I hope at least your return trip was comfortable.
For sure your grandmother feels already better now that she got all her loved ones around her.
She is in our thoughts and we all hope that she will be enjoying better health soon.
After your departure we all really missed our camping neighbours.
We spend the rest of the time mainly staying inside due to the fact it was raining all day long for about three days.
We sat in our caravan playing cards and talking about the good old times.
Fortunately the weather lit up during the last two days of our stay so we were able to go on a trip to the seaside, I collected loads of seashells.
I enclosed the most beautiful one of them to my letter. I remember you having mentioned that your grandmother loves the seaside. Would you give the seashell to her in hope it may cheers her up.
I attached the photos we have taken as well and additionally some pictures of my plain everyday life.
If you feel like it it, I would also love to get some pictures of you.
Please write back soon so I'm imformed how to handle the mobile phone issue.
Give my love to your family.
Best wishes.
Anna
Top answer
Here's a quick comment. I assume each grouping of sentences is a paragraph. Within a paragraph.
- Here's a quick comment.
- I assume each grouping of sentences is a paragraph.
- Within a paragraph.
- do not start each sentence on a new line.
- That looks very odd to an English reader.
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Here's a quick comment. I assume each grouping of sentences is a paragraph. Within a paragraph. do not start each sentence on a new line. That looks very odd to an English reader.
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