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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Animax

Hi, can anyone please check the following sentence? Thanks.
  1. Hiiro and gang continue on their journey. While they are resting at a town, they are suddenly attacked by a large shadow.
  2. Giruu is badly wounded from the last fight. In order to save him, Hiiro and Saraato head out to find a rare herb that can heal him.
  

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There are too many vowels in their names; it is distracting. Hiro and his gang continue on their journey. While they are resting in a town, they are suddenly attacked by a large shadow.

— Mister Micawber

  • There are too many vowels in their names; it is distracting.
  • Hiro and his gang continue on their journey.
  • While they are resting in a town, they are suddenly attacked by a large shadow.
  • Giru is badly wounded from the last fight.
  • In order to save him, Hiro and Sarato head out to find a rare herb that can heal him.
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There are too many vowels in their names; it is distracting.

Hiro and his gang continue on their journey. While they are resting in a town, they are suddenly attacked by a large shadow. Giru is badly wounded from the last fight. In order to save him, Hiro and Sarato head out to find a rare herb that can heal him.
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ok, but that's the right spelling name sir.
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Anonymousthat's the right spelling name sir.
It's fiction, isn't it? So, have pity on your reader and change the spelling. You are changing everything else from one language to another, aren't you?
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