An Unforgettable incident

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Please help me to correct them, thanks.Last Saturday morning, it was a windy day. Peter invited his cousins to go swimming. They cycled to the destination together. On their way, they saw a little boy swimming alone in the river. Suddenly, they heard someone shouting for help. They turned around and saw the boy drowning. He struggled / was struggling with fear. Without hesitation, Peter jumped into the river and swam towards the boy. He tried to pull him back safely to the river bank. Luckily, the boy was unhurt. He thanked us gratefully. He told us that he had a cramp in his left leg, so he could not swim at all. Thankfully, they cycled past the river and saved him a life. He would never forget this terrible experience.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Correct the underlined parts:

Last Saturday morning, it was a windy day. Peter invited his cousins to go swimming. They cycled to the destination together. On their way, they saw a little boy swimming alone in the

river.

Suddenly, they heard someone shouting for help. They turned around and saw the boy drowning. He struggled / was struggling with fear. Without hesitation, Peter jumped into the river and swam towards the boy. He tried to pull him back safely to the river bank.

Luckily, the boy was unhurt. He thanked us gratefully. He told us that he had a cramp in his left leg, so he could not swim at all. Thankfully, they cycled past the river and saved him a life. He would never forget this terrible experience.

Vincent Teo · Answer

Let me try:

Last Saturday morning, it was windy. Peter invited his cousins to go swimming. They cycled to the destination together. On their way, they saw a little boy swimming alone in the river.

Suddenly, they heard someone shouting for help. They turned around and saw the boy drowning. He struggled / was struggling in fear. Without hesitation, Peter jumped into the river and swam towards the boy. He tried to pull him back safely to the river bank.

Luckily, the boy was unhurt. He thanked us gratefully. He told us that he had a cramp in his left leg, so he was unable / did not swim at all. Thankfully, they cycled past the river and saved a life. He would never forget this terrible experience.

Mister Micawber · Answer

Last Saturday morning, it was windy. Peter invited his cousins to go swimming. They cycled to the destination together. On their way, they saw a little boy swimming alone in the river.

Suddenly, they heard a shout for help. They turned around and saw the boy drowning. He was struggling in fear. Without hesitation, Peter jumped into the river and swam towards the boy. He pulled him back safely to the river bank.

Luckily, the boy was unhurt. He thanked them gratefully. He told them that he had gotten a cramp in his left leg, so he had been unable to swim at all. Thankfully, they cycled past the river and saved a life. He would never forget this terrible experience.

Longlong2k · Answer

Pardon my poor english. I have a couple of questions regarding this article.

1. Why "they heard a shout for help" is better?
2. " He told them that he had gotten a cramp in his left leg, so he had been unable to swim at all." Why is "had gotten" better than just "had" and why use "had been"?

Thanks

Mister Micawber · Answer

1-- Because we know who 'someone' is, so the word choice is wrong.
2-- Past perfect makes clear that the cramp happened before.

PRAVIN RAAJ · Answer

Vincent Teo Please help me to correct them, thanks.
Last Saturday morning, it was a windy day. Peter invited his cousins to go swimming. They cycled to the destination together. On their way, they saw a little boy swimming alone in the
river.
Suddenly, they heard someone shouting for help. They turned around and saw the boy drowning. He struggled / was struggling with fear. Without hesitation, Peter jumped into the river and swam towards the boy. He tried to pull him back safely to the river bank.
Luckily, the boy was unhurt. He thanked us gratefully. He told us that he had a cramp in his left leg, so he could not swim at all. Thankfully, they cycled past the river and saved a precious life. He would never forget this terrible experience.

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