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Ipkqi Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing
an essay on GRE argument,please help to correct it
TOPIC: ARGUMENT38 - The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West
Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to
significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study
reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high,
people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of
colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since
colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work,
we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from
fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
In this letter, the author recommends the daily use of lchthaid ,a
nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds
and lower absenteeism. To support this recommendation the author points out
that absences form school and work is always because of colds and residents
nearby East Meria where fish consumption is very high visit the doctor only
once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. However, in several
respects, the evidence lends little credible support for the claim.
To begin with, the argument relies on the assumption that people visit the
doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds in nearby East
Meria means local people have less opportunities to catch cold. However, in
this letter, there's no evidence supporting this assumpion. Perhaps patients
caught cold in other regions also go to hospital only once or twice per year
or even less.
Even if local people have less opportunities to catch cold, the argument
needs the additional assumption that it is high fish consumption but not
other reasons that results in the low number of patients caught cold in
East Meria. Perhaps, the local people do much physical exercise. Or, local
climate maybe more healthier for residents.
Even if the author can substantiate the two foregoing assumpti
ons, the claim
relies on the additional assumption that Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement
derived from fish oil is the main substance that prevent colds. Maybe in East
Meria, it is something else that in fish can prevent colds. Furthermore, even
assuming Ichthaid contains the key substance to prevent colds, whether
ichthaid from other regions can take the same effect is suspect.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it the author
must provide clearer evidence that residents in nearby East Meria do have
less opportunities to catch cold, and it is mainly because of high fish
consumption. To better access the argument I would also need to know if the
Ichthaid contains the key substance to prevent colds. In addition, it's also
necessary to know where the fish used to derive Ichthaid is from.
Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to
significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study
reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high,
people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of
colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since
colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work,
we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from
fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
In this letter, the author recommends the daily use of lchthaid ,a
nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds
and lower absenteeism. To support this recommendation the author points out
that absences form school and work is always because of colds and residents
nearby East Meria where fish consumption is very high visit the doctor only
once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. However, in several
respects, the evidence lends little credible support for the claim.
To begin with, the argument relies on the assumption that people visit the
doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds in nearby East
Meria means local people have less opportunities to catch cold. However, in
this letter, there's no evidence supporting this assumpion. Perhaps patients
caught cold in other regions also go to hospital only once or twice per year
or even less.
Even if local people have less opportunities to catch cold, the argument
needs the additional assumption that it is high fish consumption but not
other reasons that results in the low number of patients caught cold in
East Meria. Perhaps, the local people do much physical exercise. Or, local
climate maybe more healthier for residents.
Even if the author can substantiate the two foregoing assumpti
ons, the claim
relies on the additional assumption that Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement
derived from fish oil is the main substance that prevent colds. Maybe in East
Meria, it is something else that in fish can prevent colds. Furthermore, even
assuming Ichthaid contains the key substance to prevent colds, whether
ichthaid from other regions can take the same effect is suspect.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it the author
must provide clearer evidence that residents in nearby East Meria do have
less opportunities to catch cold, and it is mainly because of high fish
consumption. To better access the argument I would also need to know if the
Ichthaid contains the key substance to prevent colds. In addition, it's also
necessary to know where the fish used to derive Ichthaid is from.
Top answer
Ipkqi In this letter, the author recommends the daily use of lchthaid ,a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism . ) To support this recommendation, the author points out that absences form school and work is always because of colds and residents nearby East Meria where fish consumption is very high visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. ) However, in several respects, the evidence lends little credible support for the claim.
- Ipkqi In this letter, the author recommends the daily use of lchthaid ,a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism .
- ) To support this recommendation, the author points out that absences form school and work is always because of colds and residents nearby East Meria where fish consumption is very high visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds.
- ) However, in several respects, the evidence lends little credible support for the claim.
- To begin with, the argument relies on the assumption that people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds in nearby East Meria means local people have less opportunities to catch cold.
- However, in this letter, there's no evidence supporting this assumpion.
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IpkqiIn this letter, the author recommends the daily use of lchthaid ,a
nutritional supplement derived from fish oil,as a good way to prevent coldsand lower absenteeism. (No need to tell this again.) To support this recommendation, the author points out
that absences form school and work is always because of colds and residents
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