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Jaycee89 Posted 17 years ago
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An Essay. Can someone hlp me 2 check?

This is a Discussion Essay. Can someone help me to check it and this essay got anything are wrong need correction. TQ.

Question;
Celebrities like Miley Cyrus have become famous overnight. what are the advantages and disadvantages of being rich and famous?

Nowadays, it is widely believed that famous and rich people have a wonderful life with no worries or problems, and this also is the wish of all the people. One of the easiest ways is to take part of the competition or through the media to let people recognize or know who you are. Of course not only the two ways, if you are Singers, Actors, Politicians, Painters, etc. also can become famous and rich. But is that become famous and rich will have a wonderful live or really no problem to be worries?

The greatest advantages of being famous and rich are usually having easier life than other people. You can live in beautiful houses maintained by housekeepers, gardeners, cooks and other servants. You also do not have to worry about paying bills, can afford the best clothes and drive the latest models cars. What is more, you can spend your holidays in expensive resorts; get the best hotel rooms and the most efficient service. Moreover, when you are famous, your name is known by everyone. Then, you are invited to the best parties and meet other celebrities. Your fans send you letters to tell you how much they admire you.

Being famous and rich of course can have the wonderful life in your live, and they do not need to worry their future life. Although it seems to be true, there are also some major drawbacks. The more they get and succeed the more they are expected by their fans to achieve. This is an immense stress for them. The state of constant stress pushes many of them in many problems.

All those being famous and rich are Singers, Actors, Politicians, Painters and many more celebrities. They all are exposed to all the dangers of fame. Wherever they go, people turn to greet them. Some crazy fans will do anything to have a glimpse of the well-know faces, to touch their clothes and see their smile. The stars are surrounded by all the media and bodyguards.

They are adored by the crowds, because their life is idealized. Fame brings them money which cannot be even calculated as it is so much. On the other hand, once become famous are no longer private individuals. The life becomes public property. Although they are rich they are hard to satisfy. Well, being famous and rich does not bring happiness.

In conclude, being famous and rich can have the wonderful life in the world. But it is also carry the negative side problem. Even how famous or rich you are, you did not have the happiness to live like a normal person. Being famous and rich you must face a lot of problem just stated before. As long as enough to eat to pay is the greatest happiness in the whole live.

  

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TQ. Here are some suggestions for the first paragraphs. It would help your essay at lot if you would make an outline of the points you are trying to make, and then follow the outline with your paragraphs.

  • TQ.
  • Here are some suggestions for the first paragraphs.
  • It would help your essay at lot if you would make an outline of the points you are trying to make, and then follow the outline with your paragraphs.
  • Question; Celebrities like Miley Cyrus have become famous overnight.
  • what are the advantages and disadvantages of being rich and famous?
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TQ. Here are some suggestions for the first paragraphs. It would help your essay at lot if you would make an outline of the points you are trying to make, and then follow the outline with your paragraphs.

Question;
Celebrities like Miley Cyrus have become famous overnight. what are the advantages and disadvantages of being rich and famous?

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1st TQ ur help.
i still got some question to ask.
basically are u understand what about i was wrote.
any points are not clearly to state.
also in ur opinion this essay is a correct discussion essay.
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Jaycee

Yes, I understood your points. They are clear.
A discussion essay does discuss the positive and negative aspects of a theme, so yours qualifies in my opinion. But you should ask your teacher, because his (her) opinion might be different - and that is what counts!

All the best,
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