An Essay??

Hi everyone! well I have written a narrative essay about an experience that has changed my life. And I would like your comments about it. Thank you in advance.

Saying that the sky is the limit is totally true, especially when you have the oportunity to be close to the sky and figure out its real meaning. Luckily, I got the chance to live that experience. The sky jump experience has deeply cleared my way of thinking towards my surroundings.
It started with a boring day. I was at home, watching TV when I recieved a call from one of my friends. She was bored as well, so she suggested that we go out together, and we watch a nice movie in the cinema. I couldn’t refuse that offer. So eventually we went to the cinema; we choosed a nice movie, and we sat in middle seats. For the first fifteen minutes I was struggling because of a tall man sitting down in front of me. He kept locking the view for me, and almost all I have seen during the first part is his head moving left and right. To relase that anger I went out to buy a pop-corn cup. And as I started eating I was surprised by a ticket inside of the cup. It was too dark so I couldn’t read what was written in it. I scrolled it inside my pocket and waited till the movie has finished. As I read it I screamed saying « I won ». well it was a wining ticket to experience and to face fear. It was the sky jump experience. After taking a plane to japan. I was too eager to do the jump and all I can remember was the sign of the assistant girl sitting next to me. After that I felt for once in my life the feeling of freedom. Convinced that the impossible can sometimes be possible . That experience was like a green light to attain my dreams .
To conclude, living that experience was an unforgetable moment, carved within my memories for ever long.