An Appreciation on the Benefits of My Scholarship

The Office of Scholarships and Financial Aid rejected this essay of mine. I am so mad. Can you tell me what seems to be the problem?
The only Instruction given aside from the format was to write an essay entitled 'Appreciation on the Benefits of Scholarship.

Here goes my essay:


Dear OSFA,

It has been four weeks or more since I last visited your office. I apologize for that. No, I was not out of school, doing gimmicks with my pals, nor hanging out 24/7 in an internet gaming café. I was very, very, busy making the best out of the free education you have gave to me.

I was very, very, busy doing 2 major projects for my 2 major subjects in Computer Science. It demanded so much time, so much research, so much analysis, so much programming, and so much work. There were even moments when I felt so depressed because of losing hope of being able to accomplish them. It was very, very, disheartening, you know what I mean? I felt even more down when I could not find the time to write this essay for Semi-Finals. Computer radiation had strained my eyes so badly, and yet I still had to read pages and pages for my Philosophy subject, and study for long, almost weekly, quizzes in Discrete Math and Physics. Indeed, this semester proved to be the toughest, my worst so far.

OSFA, I hope you understand. Because of my tough subjects, I had to prioritize many things. My very, very, late submission of this essay might suggest in you that I prioritize my scholarship the least, that I do not value it any more, that I think you are just a waste of time, a nuisance to my studying.

Please OSFA, please, do not ever think that way. I admit my scholarship was least in my priority list. But it was only because my subjects were all very demanding, and you, in so far as I know you, you, OSFA, are different from my subjects, you, OSFA, are very accepting and understanding. More than any subjects I had taken, more than any projects I had to accomplish, I value you most, OSFA; I value my scholarship so much. I will always remember that without it, all these other priorities will never be there. Without this scholarship, my life would have followed a completely different path. All the things to be prioritized, all the things to be accomplished, all of these semesters would not have been here if they were not because of my scholarship.

Thank you, OSFA. Thank you for this scholarship. Thank you for giving me the privilege to prioritize many things. These things are all tough. But they also awaken the spirit of a fighter within me. Kindly tell Ma’am Emma and Ma’am Eva a thank you, too. They are truly accepting and understanding individuals. Tell all scholarship benefactors, most especially the organizers and founders of VBBSF, a thank you, also. My scholarship would not have been possible without them. The inspiring books and my allowance from VBBSF are truly a blessing to me. Please tell them that I am truly and sincerely grateful to all of them. Thank you so much.

This thank you letter may not be enough to express my greatest appreciation to all of you. I can only hope that as you pray, our God will whisper to you that you are being a blessing to others. I thank Him for giving me so many blessings. I am glad to say that I am also able to become a blessing to others. OSFA, by prioritizing many things, I was able to accomplish not only my 2 major projects but also help my classmates accomplish their own. Thank you that, with your acceptance and understanding, I was able to do and accomplish many things.
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I tried my best to defend it. (huhu) They said, "What is it with 'Dear OSFA'?" I replied, "It is a letter addressed to OSFA." They said, "A LETTER?" I argued, "Yes, a letter. A letter can be an essay - an informal essay." They said, "Where is the APPRECIATION part?" I answered, "Can't you see the THANK YOUs?" They said, "Gratitude was last last semester's theme." Finally I cried, "Don't GRATITUDE and APPRECIATION mean the same? Don't you see any trace of APPRECIATION in this essay????" Then, I walked out and hurried myself home to write this and let go of my anger.

to u reader: PLEASE TELL ME WHAT DO YOU THINK IS WRONG WITH MY ESSAY THAT THEY REJECTED IT. Please! Thanks! I will listen to any words that you say. Just tell me something.