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Yim000 Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing
An application letter for Primary School
0 Dear all, 02 br
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00 Please help to give me an advice and correction. Thank you. 02 br
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00 Regards, 02 br
00 Vincent 02 br
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00 My address 02 br
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00 Date 02 br
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00 Mr. Wong (The Headmaster) 02 br
00 School name and school address 02 br
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00 Dear Mr. Wong: 02 br
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00 We would like to apply for admission for my daughter to your school in 2005. 02 br
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00 My daughter’s name is Ching Ching and she is studying in level 3 at *** kindergarten. 02 br
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00 We have great respect for the school's reputation, and we think highly of the school's facilities. We trust your school can provide good environment for her study here to equip herself for her future challenges. 02 br
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00 Ching Ching is an adorable girl. Honestly speaking, she is not very smart but she is very active and she enjoy almost all activities inside and outside kindergarten such as common academic lessons, ballet dancing, violin lesson, school panic, building visiting and other activities. She can do within our expectation if we give her an enough encourage and guiding. For example, she almost gets 100% marks on school’s memorable test. 02 br
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00 With respect to music, her violin teacher told us that she play it well. 02 br
00 With respect to ballet, her ballet teacher satisfies her performance too and informs us we can let her to take the exam of ballet. With regard to common academic lessons, she already like picking her school book up and read loudly if she has a space time and she love writing and drawing although the output is not good. 02 br
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00 We would give all our effects to support her and to improve our knowledge about how to guide her in the best way. We try to join related forum and discussion as much as we can. Moreover, in violin aspect, to make sure we can guide her better, I took a full adult violin course separately. Actually, we don’t expect her to be a famous violin player, but we hope she can enjoy it. 02 br
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00 Thank you for your attention to this matter, and we look forward to your positive reply. 02 br
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00 Yours sincerely, 02 br
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00 Mr. Vincent Yim 0-
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00 Please help to give me an advice and correction. Thank you. 02 br
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00 Regards, 02 br
00 Vincent 02 br
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00 ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- 02 br
00 My address 02 br
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00 Date 02 br
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00 Mr. Wong (The Headmaster) 02 br
00 School name and school address 02 br
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00 Dear Mr. Wong: 02 br
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00 We would like to apply for admission for my daughter to your school in 2005. 02 br
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00 My daughter’s name is Ching Ching and she is studying in level 3 at *** kindergarten. 02 br
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00 We have great respect for the school's reputation, and we think highly of the school's facilities. We trust your school can provide good environment for her study here to equip herself for her future challenges. 02 br
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00 Ching Ching is an adorable girl. Honestly speaking, she is not very smart but she is very active and she enjoy almost all activities inside and outside kindergarten such as common academic lessons, ballet dancing, violin lesson, school panic, building visiting and other activities. She can do within our expectation if we give her an enough encourage and guiding. For example, she almost gets 100% marks on school’s memorable test. 02 br
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00 With respect to music, her violin teacher told us that she play it well. 02 br
00 With respect to ballet, her ballet teacher satisfies her performance too and informs us we can let her to take the exam of ballet. With regard to common academic lessons, she already like picking her school book up and read loudly if she has a space time and she love writing and drawing although the output is not good. 02 br
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00 We would give all our effects to support her and to improve our knowledge about how to guide her in the best way. We try to join related forum and discussion as much as we can. Moreover, in violin aspect, to make sure we can guide her better, I took a full adult violin course separately. Actually, we don’t expect her to be a famous violin player, but we hope she can enjoy it. 02 br
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00 Thank you for your attention to this matter, and we look forward to your positive reply. 02 br
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00 Yours sincerely, 02 br
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00 Mr. Vincent Yim 0-
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0 Hi all, 02 br
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00 Can you help me? I have to release this letter on Jun 4, 2005. Thank you. : ) 0-
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00 Can you help me? I have to release this letter on Jun 4, 2005. Thank you. : ) 0-
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0 Mister Micawber/ hitchhiker/ nona the brit, 02 br
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00 Would you help? It is urgent and it is very important for my daughter's future. 02 br
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00 Thank you very much in advance! 0-
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00 Would you help? It is urgent and it is very important for my daughter's future. 02 br
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00 Thank you very much in advance! 0-
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0 Vincent, 02 br
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00 I have corrected any grammatical errors, and reworked certain phrases so they read 'easier' in English. The first thing I picked up on was that you often switch between "we" and "my." You are writing the letter as a couple yet refer to your daughter as only "yours." This makes it difficult to read. I don't know if the letter is from you and your partner
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00 I have corrected any grammatical errors, and reworked certain phrases so they read 'easier' in English. The first thing I picked up on was that you often switch between "we" and "my." You are writing the letter as a couple yet refer to your daughter as only "yours." This makes it difficult to read. I don't know if the letter is from you and your partner
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0 Hi rwiles, 02 br
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00 Thank you so much for your correction and advice. 02 br
00 Yes, for "school panic", actually, I want to say "school picnics". 02 br
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00 Can you help to give me an advice for two more questions as below: 02 br
00 1) For "visiting buildings", actually, I want to say she visited schools, factories and exhibition
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00 Thank you so much for your correction and advice. 02 br
00 Yes, for "school panic", actually, I want to say "school picnics". 02 br
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00 Can you help to give me an advice for two more questions as below: 02 br
00 1) For "visiting buildings", actually, I want to say she visited schools, factories and exhibition
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0 Vincent, 02 br
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00 To answer 1) I would write 02 br
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00 'She enjoys all activities inside and outside kindergarten INCLUDING common academic lessons, ballet dancing, violin lessons, PICNICS WITH HER CLASSMATES, SCHOOL EXCURSIONS, and many other activities.' 02 br
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00 or 02 br
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00 'She enjoys all activities
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00 To answer 1) I would write 02 br
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00 'She enjoys all activities inside and outside kindergarten INCLUDING common academic lessons, ballet dancing, violin lessons, PICNICS WITH HER CLASSMATES, SCHOOL EXCURSIONS, and many other activities.' 02 br
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00 'She enjoys all activities
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0 Hi Rwiles, 02 br
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00 I do appreciate your great help! Thank you very much! 02 br
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00 Have a good weekends! 02 br
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00 Best Wishes, 02 br
00 Vincent 0-
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00 I do appreciate your great help! Thank you very much! 02 br
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00 Have a good weekends! 02 br
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00 Best Wishes, 02 br
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