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Mezzopiano Posted 7 years ago
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American Heart Association

Hi, can you please correct these few sentences for me? Please make it more natural and smoother. Thank you.

If you are in need of a support group, here is one: American Heart Association. This is a place where people with heart conditions can share their own stories and can receive sympathy, motivation and advice from other people with similar past.

  

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"If you are in need of a support group, you can contact the American Heart Association. It is an organisation that helps people with heart conditions. They can tell you about places where you can get support if you want to share your story and get encouragement and advice from other people with similar medical histories.

  • "If you are in need of a support group, you can contact the American Heart Association.
  • It is an organisation that helps people with heart conditions.
  • They can tell you about places where you can get support if you want to share your story and get encouragement and advice from other people with similar medical histories.
  • *** Notes: I tried to keep the tone consistent by using the 2nd person singular "you," as it started.
  • For "sympathy" and "motivation," I used more simple language.
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"If you are in need of a support group, you can contact the American Heart Association. It is an organisation that helps people with heart conditions. They can tell you about places where you can get support if you want to share your story and get encouragement and advice from other people with similar medical histories.

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Notes:

I tried to keep the tone consistent by

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