Am I thinking with my language?

Hello,

Dear teachers, there's something that really worries me. I'm a transaltor and my mother tongue is Arabic. I'm good at English, but sometimes I think I sound ackward because I think in my own langauge and write in English. Lately I wrote something (it meant to be a song) I'm just a beginner I want you to read it please and tell me wether or not it makes sense to you as antive speakers.

Here I come to you..
Because I failed to forget,
To heal for I'm mentally sick,
To get away from regrets,

Every place I ran to,
was deporting me with its freeze..
Every remedy I turned to,
was aggravating my disease..

Here I come to you,
When all the streets,
All the gardens,
All the pavements,
were stopping me from walking without you..

When all the shores,
All the ports,
All the doors,
were keeping me from leaving without you..

Here I come to you..
When the features of my face,
The lines of my hands,
The cords of my voice,
Had forgotten me,
And kept reminiscing about you..

When everything around me..
was rejecting me,
hating me,
killing me,
Without you..

Here I come to you,
Owning nothing but my name,
Knowing nothing but my pain,

Here I come to you,
Don't know where this road leads to,
But I know for sure that
when I decided to leave,
You were healed,
And I chose to bleed..


Thank you very much.

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