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Tamguatlay Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
All parents/visitors are requested to report to the General Office first before proceeding to other areas of the school premises.
The following is a notice on the beam at the entrance of a school. I find the wording too long-winded. Could a native speaker rephrase the notice so that unnecessary words are removed? Thanks.
All parents/visitors are requested to report to the General Office first before proceeding to other areas of the school premises. Thank you.
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The Principal
I would do so as follows. Is it OK?
Parents/visitors have to report to the General Office before proceeding to other premises of the school.
All parents/visitors are requested to report to the General Office first before proceeding to other areas of the school premises. Thank you.
By order
The Principal
I would do so as follows. Is it OK?
Parents/visitors have to report to the General Office before proceeding to other premises of the school.
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"All parents/visitors please report to the General Office before proceeding. " I would replace "have to" with 'replace' and drop everything after 'proceeding'. The rest of the statement can be easily assumed, after all everyone knows they are in a school, so why specify it?
- "All parents/visitors please report to the General Office before proceeding.
- " I would replace "have to" with 'replace' and drop everything after 'proceeding'.
- The rest of the statement can be easily assumed, after all everyone knows they are in a school, so why specify it?
- And the tag is not necessary, it is irrelevant.
- I have even seen such a sign shorter still, like this - "All visitors please report to the Office"
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"All parents/visitors please report to the General Office before proceeding. Thank you."
I would replace "have to" with 'replace' and drop everything after 'proceeding'. The rest of the statement can be easily assumed, after all everyone knows they are in a school, so why specify it? And the tag is not necessary, it is irrelevant. I have even seen such a sign shorter still, like this -
I would replace "have to" with 'replace' and drop everything after 'proceeding'. The rest of the statement can be easily assumed, after all everyone knows they are in a school, so why specify it? And the tag is not necessary, it is irrelevant. I have even seen such a sign shorter still, like this -
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