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Mizanur Posted 12 years ago
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Aksing for Correction

I would be grateful if any of you proof read following application.

Request for Financial Aid

I would like to apply to apply for “Full Scholarship” offered by institution or “ABC Scholarship” to support my study at “XYZ institute
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To be honest I came from a typical middle class family of a third world country like AB. The tuition fee and living cost in a city like GG cannot be afforded neither by me nor my family. My father worked in AB Air force and retired in 1993 as Warrant Officer (It is the first Junior Commissioned Officers (JCO) rank of AB Air Force.). The salary of government employee is not competitive in my country. So he had not able manage savings from his salary and small amount of pension is the main source of his income. One of the most unfortunate parts of my life is that my father died on 13-03-2013, the date known as unlucky thirteen became extremely unfortunate for me.

My mother is alive and she owned a small house and renting out flat is the single source of her income. She gets about 37,000 Taka each month from house rent by which she bears her living expenditure. At present she lives in a small flat together with my sister in capital city. She is not in a position to provide me financial help to carry out my study in GG.

I did full-time job for 2 years in entry level position in country AB and I have not taken any money from my family since January, 2010 and bearing my own cost along with giving financial support to my family. Therefore, I do not have any personal savings to provide financial support to continue my tertiary education in GG. Presently I am pursuing my Education at University of BB where there is no tuition fee for student and I am receiving financial support from ‘State Educational Loan Fund’ under ‘QQ scheme’ to cover my living expenses. The Funding Body decision on education support 2013-14 is enclosed herewith for your kind perusal where you will find the details description of financial support. It is noteworthy that I also received the same amount of grant for 2012-13 academic years and financial grant was extended for 2013-14 due to my successful completion of first year with very satisfactory grade.

I have tried to describe my current financial situation and I cordially ask you to consider my application for financial assistance.
  

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Here are some suggestions. I would like to apply to apply for a “Full Scholarship” (no capitals, no quotation marks ) offered by your institution or the “ABC Scholarship” ( no quotation marks ) to support my study at “XYZ institute (full stop) To be honest I came am from a typical middle class family of a third world country like AB why not give your country's name, instead of some country like AB) . The tuition fee s and living cost s in a city like GG cannot be afforded neither (double negative.

  • Here are some suggestions.
  • I would like to apply to apply for a “Full Scholarship” (no capitals, no quotation marks ) offered by your institution or the “ABC Scholarship” ( no quotation marks ) to support my study at “XYZ institute (full stop) To be honest I came am from a typical middle class family of a third world country like AB why not give your country's name, instead of some country like AB) .
  • The tuition fee s and living cost s in a city like GG cannot be afforded neither (double negative.
  • ) by me nor my family.
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Here are some suggestions.

I would like to apply to apply for a“Full Scholarship” (no capitals, no quotation marks ) offered by your institution or the “ABC Scholarship” (no quotation marks ) to support my study at “XYZ institute (full stop)

To be honest I came am
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Thanks for your very useful comments.
I have to submit a Statement of Purpose in the application package. I already wrote a draft and I know it's a two page long and takes time to read it. I would really appreciate if you proof read this for me.Thanks a lot..

SOP

My interest in ‘International Development Studies’ was sowed during the early years of my Undergr
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My interest in ‘International Development Studies’ (No quotes) was sowed during the early years of my Undergraduate (no capital letter) level. I completed my bachelor’s degree in Public Administration from University of D and I obtained First class in my Bachelor. I had various courses with regard to development tactics and policy strategies, and studied the
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Thanks a bunch for your quick reply.

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