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Mr1bin Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Agree or disagree?
Please check my wrong grammar or the other things.
I made the words bold. : )
Q. Some people think that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
My answer
I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
The first reason is that secondhand smoking is as harmful/bad as smoking directly.
The first reason is that indirect smoking is as harmful/bad as direct smoking.
The first reason is that smoking indirectly is as harmful/bad as smoking directly
Because/For example, it can lead to/cause all kinds of cancers and bad for the expectant mothers.
Second, smokers should quit smoking for their own benefit. Because smokers can get lung cancers, heart diseases and even bad breath.
For these reasons, I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
I made the words bold. : )
Q. Some people think that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
My answer
I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
The first reason is that secondhand smoking is as harmful/bad as smoking directly.
The first reason is that indirect smoking is as harmful/bad as direct smoking.
The first reason is that smoking indirectly is as harmful/bad as smoking directly
Because/For example, it can lead to/cause all kinds of cancers and bad for the expectant mothers.
Second, smokers should quit smoking for their own benefit. Because smokers can get lung cancers, heart diseases and even bad breath.
For these reasons, I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
Top answer
Hello! Your FIRST choice is almost perfect! Perhaps change to "second-hand SMOKE is as harmful as smoking directly.
- Hello!
- Your FIRST choice is almost perfect!
- Perhaps change to "second-hand SMOKE is as harmful as smoking directly.
- For example, it can lead to different forms of cancer and is especially bad for pregnant women & their unborn baby.
- Lung CANCER (not cancers), heart disease.
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Hello!
Your FIRST choice is almost perfect!
Perhaps change to "second-hand SMOKE is as harmful as smoking directly.
For example, it can lead to different forms of cancer and is especially bad for pregnant women & their unborn baby.
Lung CANCER (not cancers), heart disease. (If they have those 2, bad breath is the least of their worries!)
I hope this h
Your FIRST choice is almost perfect!
Perhaps change to "second-hand SMOKE is as harmful as smoking directly.
For example, it can lead to different forms of cancer and is especially bad for pregnant women & their unborn baby.
Lung CANCER (not cancers), heart disease. (If they have those 2, bad breath is the least of their worries!)
I hope this h
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mr1bin,
Here are my suggested revisions. For the second reason, get rid of the period before "because" to make one sentence. The following is an incomplete sentence: "Because smokers can get lung cancers, heart diseases and even bad breath."
So the revised way reads:
I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
The first reason
Here are my suggested revisions. For the second reason, get rid of the period before "because" to make one sentence. The following is an incomplete sentence: "Because smokers can get lung cancers, heart diseases and even bad breath."
So the revised way reads:
I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
The first reason
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This is my suggestion:
The following is an incomplete sentence: "Because smokers can get lung cancers, heart diseases and even bad breath." Get rid of the period before because and make it one sentence.
I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
The first reason is that secondhand smoking is as harmful as smoking direc
The following is an incomplete sentence: "Because smokers can get lung cancers, heart diseases and even bad breath." Get rid of the period before because and make it one sentence.
I agree that there should be more restrictions on smoking cigarettes.
The first reason is that secondhand smoking is as harmful as smoking direc
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