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Chiachen Posted 14 years ago
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Advice for work-life balance?

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I'd like to write some advice for keeping a good work-life balance.
The first important step is knowing what are the important things in our life: the family, passions and one's own health. If you know and keep these simple things carefully, your will live well. Secondly, you have to make a work/study schedule/program and follow it strictly. It's very important to take time for yourself and have vacations. At least once a year, you must take a vacation with your family to a relaxing place.
  

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I have underlined some problem areas. Please fix them and post your revised paragraph here. The first important step is knowing what are the important things in our life: the family, passions and one's own health.

  • I have underlined some problem areas.
  • Please fix them and post your revised paragraph here.
  • The first important step is knowing what are the important things in our life: the family, passions and one's own health.
  • If you know and keep these simple things carefully, your will live well.
  • Secondly, you have to make a work/study schedule/program and follow it strictly.
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I have underlined some problem areas. Please fix them and post your revised paragraph here.

The first important step is knowing what are the important things in our life: the family, passions and one's own health. If you know and keep these simple things carefully, your will live well. Secondly, you have to make a work/study schedule/program and follow
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The first important step is knowing what the important things are in our life: the family, our passions? and one's own health. If you know and prioritize these carefully, you will live well. Secondly, you have to make a schedule for work and study and follow it strictly. It's very important to make time for yourself and have vacations. At least once a year, you must take a vacation with your f
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Much better!

The first important step is knowing what the important things are in our life: our family, our passions, and our health. If you know and prioritize these carefully, you will live well. Secondly, you have to make a schedule for work and study and follow it strictly. It is very important to make time for yourself and have vacations. At least o
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The first important step is knowing what the important things are in life: the family, passion, and own health; once you know and prioritize them carefully, you will live well. Secondly, you have to make a schedule for work and study and follow it strictly. It is very important to make time for yourself and have vacations; at least once a year, you must take a relaxing vacation with your family
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Thank you. Didn't know you were still working. In the writing, is it good to switch between we and you. Would this also work: The important things in life: family, passions and health?
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chiachen In the writing, is it good to switch between we and you
No, it is bad.
chiachenWould this also work: The important things in life: family, passions and health?
Yes.

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