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00I wrote three letters as a homework.02br
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00I need your advice.02br
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00Any comments are welcome!!!02br
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00If there00’00s 00 00better expression, just let me know!02br
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00Thanks in advance!02br
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00Dear Mr.Eliott02br
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00I am a sub-manager of K.H bank.02br
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00I am writing this e-mail concerning interest rates for the deposits.02br
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00(Are there other expressions saying 00‘00I am writing this e-mail00…00.00’00)02br
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00Due to the change in government regulations, we are able to increase the interest rates to 12%.02br
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00I hope this information would help you.02br
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00Yours truly02br
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00Ellisa02br
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00Dear Ms Tomomi02br
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00I am a sub-manager of K.H. bank.02br
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00I am writing in connection with interest rates for loans.02br
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00Unfortunately, we have been forced to increase the interest rates from 8 to 14%. This is owing to a change in government regulations which is beyond our control.02br
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00I hope this information is helpful for you.02br
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00Yours sincerely02br
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00Ellisa02br
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00Dear Sir or Madam02br
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00I am a manager of sales department at Pink company.02br
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00I am happy to tell you that we relocated our office from 00 to 00.02br
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00Feel free to visit our new office and see our newly released products.02br
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00Best regards02br
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00Ellisa02br
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00Manager of sales department, Pink02br
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