ADVANTAGE-DISADVANTAGE ESSAYS

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Topic: These days, more and more people are going to the other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working a foreign country.

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It cannot be denied that more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or study. For many people, especially young adults, this is an enormous opportunity in order to make a bright future and ordinary workers leave their homelands, hoping to become more successful. However, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do this. Personally, I believe this issue has two sides. In thi essay, I will discuss some of the reasons why a large number of people go abroad for studying and and why immigration has increased significantly in recent years are popular and some of the challenges to be over come.

Let's start by looking at the advantages of going abroad to study or work. One of the main positives of living and working in a foreign country is that it develop. What i mean by this is that you have the chance to meet people from different cultures and learn a lot of interesting things. Another benefit is salary because people really need money to support their lives. Some Vietnamese people, for instance, like to move to the US and Australia for living and working because they think they get a higher income than in Vietnam and they can enjoy a higher standard of life. Furthermore, they can improve their current life by working and studying in a new environment to get more experience. Finally, they also have some good benefits for the government after people retire.

On the other hand, working and studying in a foreign country, people face some difficulties. Missing their traditional culture is the first disadvantage. It is really difficult to live in a country which has a different culture. For example, local food is strange to eat and the cost is expensive. Moreover people may get homesick because their families are so far from them. Lastly, it is dangerous when people they do not understand about new environment a foreign communication.

All things considered, life in a foreign country is never easy. You have to weigh up the pros of the better lifestyle, weather and the cons of culture shock and language barrier. Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives.