Admission letter for applying primary one

Dear all,

Please help to fine tune my letter below which I need to bring along with my son's primary one admission interview. Excecpt his own performance on the day, that would be the most I can help him as his father.

Thanks,

RY

Dear Miss Leung:

We would like to apply for admission for my son to Munsang Collage (Primary School) in 2011-2012. Our son is named Yip Wang Hei (Andrew) and he is currently studying in Class GA3 at Hong Kong Preschool Shatin. We have a great respect for your school's reputation, and think highly of the school's facilities. We believe that your school can provide a good environment in which he can study, and can effectively equip him for the challenges of the future.

Andrew performs well in many aspects – self care & discipline, linguistic development, creativity and emotional development. He has a bright and cheerful character that contributes to his good social relations with his peers. He has strong curiosity and energy to explore new things around him.

We have arranged classes in various fields of interest for him such as Kumon math, ice skating, and skipping. We wish him not only to have a balanced development but also discover his potential talents to develop his interests through exposure and stimulation in those areas.

With your school’s well developed excellent reputation, mission, philosophy, curriculum and facilities, Andrew will grow with balanced and all-round development.

Thank you for considering our application, and we are looking forward to your positive reply.

Yours sincerely,

Mr. & Mrs Robert Yip