Admission letter ?

Hi ~

I am trying to write a letter to this korean university I am dying to get into , but I don't know how to write this leter , I've searched all over the web then found your form .. I hope you can help me .

So here is the letter a wrote can someone help me to make formal , because I know it i not .. and is there anything else I should include ?

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To whom it may concern:

I am writing to request information on the undergraduate program at your university. I am especially interested in the Business Administration collage.

As for my educational background, currently I am in my last year secondary school (grade 12). I am in the commercial track studying finance, accounting and economics.

I will graduate in June 2012 and plane to start collage in September 2012.

Since I am Bahraini I would like to know if you accept foreign students.. And what are the courses I can enroll in, will I be able to enroll like the normal Korean student (Full-time Students) for 4-years, or should I enroll as an exchange student and study for 1 or 2 semesters?

Sincerely,

My Name