Admission Essay

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Rutgers requires that you provide a short essay that is your original work. Please reflect on what you consider to be an important personal experience related to your talents, interests, or commitments. Using this experience, please tell us what you learned about yourself. How will this experience prepare you for success at Rutgers?

My name is Jose Ruiz, I was born in Puerto Rico but raised in the United States. My mother came from Puerto Rico with me when I was only a few months old. My father at the time was in the U.S Army who was barely around, so My mother decided to come to the U.S. and start a new life. Coming to the U.S at the beginning was very difficult and discouraging. The way of living, the climate, the culture and the diversity was too much to handle. My mother did not know how to speak English or where to begin. She moved in New Jersey and settled there, where we live now. While growing up in New Jersey and attending school here, I was amazed at all the multi-cultures around me. There were people all ages speaking languages that I never even heard of, from countries I never heard or believed existed. I was able to pick up the English language very well and learned it fast. Going to school in New Jersey had the biggest influence on me. My mother said that the schools in Puerto Rico were very small and only had a few students. They also didn't have enough supplies for the student or activities. The education was very limited. She told me that I have all the opportunities in the world to become someone. The schools in New Jersey are incredible. They have a bunch of classes, with multitudes of students from all over. Programs and curricular activities, all kinds of sports. I attended William L Dickinson HS. I joined the chess club and the breakdance program they have here from my freshman year to my junior year. It was some of the best times of my life. I later graduated high school which was a huge achievement and now I could go to a college. Both my parents only have a high school education, so I would be the first to go to college and pursue a career, which is easier said than done. Figuring out what career you wish to pursue is a hard task. For myself, a career is an overall goal in which it takes time, but with the help of Rutgers University, an outstanding school I will be one step closer to it. Being given the opportunity to aspire to more than I can, gives the confidence I need to achieve the goal. For that reason your university is the right fit for me. College is an opportunity to pursue my goals. College is a chance for myself to gain more knowledge so that I can be a step closer to that goal. It is a different level of education but I believe that with my hard work and dedication I can endure it. Your university provides wonderful programs so that I can be successful in what I major in. It offers great academic quality, flexibility, and affordability. This university is a great environment for my learning experience.
I believe that with my acceptance, I will contribute to such a diverse community. With this environment, feeling comfortable is another great way to gain great progress in my road to success.I can bring to your university my strengths and qualities. I also want to bring my strive to succeed in everything I do. With my potential, hard work and dedication I plan on using such a great educational environment to the best of my abilities to pursue my aspirations.