0
Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
ad phrases
Hi. I'm trying to make a sort of advertisement phrases and I'm not an English native speaker.
In the below sentences, 'Studio', 'Stage', and 'Salon' refer to a specific space in my building.
And I'd like to make them sound as concise as possible.
The first sentence has a full meaning and the sentences below it are option sentences that I'm considering as the ad phrases.
There are three cases in total.
I hope you can help me choose one.
Please let me know if all the option sentences sound strange to you and give me some suggestions.
Full meaning: Studio is a place where we produce originality as the outcome of our projects.
Option #1: Studio for producing originality
Option #2: Studio where we produce originality
Full meaning: Stage is a place where we share documentaries of our projects.
Option #1: Stage for sharing documentaries of our projects
Option #2: Stage where we share documentaries of our projects
Full meaning: Salon is a place where movement begins
Option #1: Salon where movement begins
In the below sentences, 'Studio', 'Stage', and 'Salon' refer to a specific space in my building.
And I'd like to make them sound as concise as possible.
The first sentence has a full meaning and the sentences below it are option sentences that I'm considering as the ad phrases.
There are three cases in total.
I hope you can help me choose one.
Please let me know if all the option sentences sound strange to you and give me some suggestions.
Full meaning: Studio is a place where we produce originality as the outcome of our projects.
Option #1: Studio for producing originality
Option #2: Studio where we produce originality
Full meaning: Stage is a place where we share documentaries of our projects.
Option #1: Stage for sharing documentaries of our projects
Option #2: Stage where we share documentaries of our projects
Full meaning: Salon is a place where movement begins
Option #1: Salon where movement begins
Top answer
Your option are not complete sentences. Are you trying to write eg captions eg point-form-style phrases.? In other words, what are you trying to achieve?
- Your option are not complete sentences.
- Are you trying to write eg captions eg point-form-style phrases.?
- In other words, what are you trying to achieve?
- It seems awkward not to say 'the', eg The Studio / The Stage / The Salon.
- ' Producing originality' doesn't sound good to me.
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
5 Answers
0
Your option are not complete sentences. Are you trying to write eg captions eg point-form-style phrases.?
In other words, what are you trying to achieve?
It seems awkward not to say 'the',
eg The Studio / The Stage / The Salon.
In other words, what are you trying to achieve?
It seems awkward not to say 'the',
eg The Studio / The Stage / The Salon.
00
Thanks for the kind answer.
1) purpose
These phrases will be printed on the wall paper of each room.
Then, do you think complete sentences are better than just nouns?
2) the
And I totally agree with you in that I need to put 'the' in front of Studio, Stage, and Salon as you suggested.
3) produce
I want to emphasize that the outcome of our projects has the
1) purpose
These phrases will be printed on the wall paper of each room.
Then, do you think complete sentences are better than just nouns?
2) the
And I totally agree with you in that I need to put 'the' in front of Studio, Stage, and Salon as you suggested.
3) produce
I want to emphasize that the outcome of our projects has the
00
1) purpose
These phrases will be printed on the wall paper of each room.
Then, do you think complete sentences are better than just nouns?
Not necessarily.
The Salon - Where movement begins sounds OK.
The phrases for the Stage don't sound very good to me.
These phrases will be printed on the wall paper of each room.
Then, do you think complete sentences are better than just nouns?
Not necessarily.
The Salon - Where movement begins sounds OK.
The phrases for the Stage don't sound very good to me.
00
0
Without greater context, this is the best I could come up with:
Studio. The birthplace of original ideas.
Stage. The document sharing platform.
Salon. Putting plans into action.
Source: I am a copywriter in an ad agency.
Studio. The birthplace of original ideas.
Stage. The document sharing platform.
Salon. Putting plans into action.
Source: I am a copywriter in an ad agency.
0
Related Questions