Academic Writing Task 1

Please help me check and give opinions. Thank you so much for you consideration.

Note: Blue: USA, Red: China

Answer:

The graph shows the rate of birth in a simultaneous manner in China and the USA changes from 1920 to 2000.

Overall, although the 1945-1950 period witnessed the bump in population during 8 decades when the number of born rate reached the peak from the bottom, the whole tended to reduce for both countries.

In 1920, even though there was a slight change, the rate of The USA was higher than one of China with the gap keeping stable approximately only 1%. Until 1935-1945, the rate of two countries fluctuated and their position also had a quick change, but they always remained above 5%. However, The USA could not keep the rate above 5% and declined to its lowest point under 5% in the 1945s, similarly, China reached the bottom with 5%. But in the 1950s, the figure of both countries increased significantly and reached the highest value during the 8-decade period with 20% for China and 15% for the USA.

Turning to the following period, at the top of rate, the percentages just had the same trend that dropped gradually from 20% and 15% to approximately 2% and 7% respectively for China and the USA in 2000.