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Soren Madsen Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Academic Job Application
Is this introductory sentence to long or incorrect in any way?
"As a Registered Dietitian and a holder of a Bachelor’s Degree in Clinical Dietetics and a Vocational Education in Sales, I would like to present...."
I am having a hard time shortening it down. I am an RD on the basis of my BA and the salesman education must be mentoined since they are both relevant. :/
"As a Registered Dietitian and a holder of a Bachelor’s Degree in Clinical Dietetics and a Vocational Education in Sales, I would like to present...."
I am having a hard time shortening it down. I am an RD on the basis of my BA and the salesman education must be mentoined since they are both relevant. :/
Top answer
Hi, My first reaction, frankly, is that it sounds too much like you are boasting. ' I would like to present' is not a common phrase in a job application. What's the complete sentence?
- Hi, My first reaction, frankly, is that it sounds too much like you are boasting.
- ' I would like to present' is not a common phrase in a job application.
- What's the complete sentence?
- Clive
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Hi,
My first reaction, frankly, is that it sounds too much like you are boasting.
'
I would like to present' is not a common phrase in a job application. What's the complete sentence?
Clive
My first reaction, frankly, is that it sounds too much like you are boasting.
'
I would like to present' is not a common phrase in a job application. What's the complete sentence?
Clive
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Hi, it's is not boasting.
Is have two degree's relevant for those types of jobs I am looking for according to the typical announcement.
As a Registered Dietitian and a holder of a Bachelor’s Degree in Clinical Dietetics and a Vocational Education in Sales, I would like to present my resume in consideration for your Account Executive position in Australia, which was advertised this wee
Is have two degree's relevant for those types of jobs I am looking for according to the typical announcement.
As a Registered Dietitian and a holder of a Bachelor’s Degree in Clinical Dietetics and a Vocational Education in Sales, I would like to present my resume in consideration for your Account Executive position in Australia, which was advertised this wee
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Hi,
it's is not boasting. I just offered my first impression. Such matters are subjective.
Is have two degree's relevant for those types of jobs I am looking for according to the typical announcement.
As a Registered Dietitian and a holder of a Bachelor’s Degree in Clinical Dietetics and a Vocational Education in Sales, I would like to pres
it's is not boasting. I just offered my first impression. Such matters are subjective.
Is have two degree's relevant for those types of jobs I am looking for according to the typical announcement.
As a Registered Dietitian and a holder of a Bachelor’s Degree in Clinical Dietetics and a Vocational Education in Sales, I would like to pres
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I thought that feedback was what I gave you. I regret that it displeased you.
Perhaps someone else will offer comments that are more to your liking..
Clive
Perhaps someone else will offer comments that are more to your liking..
Clive
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Clive,
I do not think that you can help me. Thank you for your time. I will start a new thread in the academic forum.
Kind regards
Søren Hjort Madsen
Professional Bachelor in Clinical Dietetics 2013
Vocational Education in Sales 2008
I do not think that you can help me. Thank you for your time. I will start a new thread in the academic forum.
Kind regards
Søren Hjort Madsen
Professional Bachelor in Clinical Dietetics 2013
Vocational Education in Sales 2008
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