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Could I have your opinion about this? It is a technical paper abstract.
Do you suggest any alternation? (Is alternation right word?
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"The effects of different temperatures and pressures on the rate of deposition and uniformity of coating of layers of polysilicon on wafers of silicon when injecting gas through two common inlets are investigated. The system is modeled by finite element software, and the results of simulations are harvested by the Computational Fluid Dynamics (CFD) tool of the software and are based on the real-world dimensions of the SEMATECH/BTU Bruce horizontal hot-wall LPCVD system. Characteristics of materials, boundary conditions and applied physical and chemical equations are the initial parameters of the model."
Could I have your opinion about this? It is a technical paper abstract.
Do you suggest any alternation? (Is alternation right word?
)"The effects of different temperatures and pressures on the rate of deposition and uniformity of coating of layers of polysilicon on wafers of silicon when injecting gas through two common inlets are investigated. The system is modeled by finite element software, and the results of simulations are harvested by the Computational Fluid Dynamics (CFD) tool of the software and are based on the real-world dimensions of the SEMATECH/BTU Bruce horizontal hot-wall LPCVD system. Characteristics of materials, boundary conditions and applied physical and chemical equations are the initial parameters of the model."
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Do you suggest any alternative ? This paper investigates t he effects of temperature and pressure on the d eposition rate and coating uniformity of polysilicon layers on wafers of silicon when injecting gas through two common inlets. The system is modeled by finite element software, and the simulation results, based on the real-world dimensions of the SEMATECH/BTU Bruce horizontal hot-wall LPCVD system, are harvested by the Computational Fluid Dynamics (CFD) tool of that software.
- Do you suggest any alternative ?
- This paper investigates t he effects of temperature and pressure on the d eposition rate and coating uniformity of polysilicon layers on wafers of silicon when injecting gas through two common inlets.
- The system is modeled by finite element software, and the simulation results, based on the real-world dimensions of the SEMATECH/BTU Bruce horizontal hot-wall LPCVD system, are harvested by the Computational Fluid Dynamics (CFD) tool of that software.
- Material characteristics , boundary conditions and applied physical and chemical equations are the initial parameters of the model.
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Do you suggest any alternative?
This paper investigates the effects of temperature and pressure on the deposition rate and coating uniformity of polysilicon layers on wafers of silicon when injecting gas through two common inlets. The system is modeled by finite element software, and the simulation results, based on the real-world dimensions of the SE
This paper investigates the effects of temperature and pressure on the deposition rate and coating uniformity of polysilicon layers on wafers of silicon when injecting gas through two common inlets. The system is modeled by finite element software, and the simulation results, based on the real-world dimensions of the SE
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Try to avoid (that word again!) the 'of' genitive when the noun will also work as an adjective, as in
the rate of deposition and uniformity of coating => deposition rate and coating uniformity.
This will save you words and save the reader's patience.
the rate of deposition and uniformity of coating => deposition rate and coating uniformity.
This will save you words and save the reader's patience.
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Thanks, I usually use the pattern you've just said, but I thought it might be more precise or scientific if I use that style. I don't know the reason, perhaps I am wrong, but I am sure that in those contexts "of" are used much more than what I regularly use. Do you have any idea why it sounds to me like that? (of course you are not in my mind, but your experience could help me if you have seen suc
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It sounds like that because the form is longer and nominalized, which is one characteristic of academic writing, especially the writing by the more turgid writers. As you can see, some of the 'of' genitives I left in your paragraph, but it is easy to use too many of them.
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Mister Micawberturgid writers.
Thank you for your excellent explanation and your
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